Sarah Ann Hall

Reporting on writing in progress or, more probably, not; practising flash fiction.

#FridayFictioneers – 20/7/18 – Phoebe

with 30 comments

Every Wednesday Rochelle Wisoff-Fields publishes a photo prompt to inspire writers to write 100-words of flash fiction or poetry.

At any point during the following week, the Friday Fictioneers post their 100-word tales. Read the other stories by clicking below.

Thank you to Rochelle for hosting and to Dale for this week’s prompt. There was a haziness, a dulling I saw that resulted in my story below.

 

Phoebe

(Genre: speculative/ apocalyptic fiction; 100-words)

Slowly we watched her die, the energy leaking from her. The last days were the worst. Each morning there was a little less light.

The eternal optimists said it wouldn’t happen. There was life in the old girl yet. But we all knew she had to go. We all die eventually.

Few used to be able to choose the time and method of their passing, but plenty did this time, not wanting to linger.

Those of us who stayed to see what happens probably don’t have long. We were surprised all life didn’t end immediately when the sun went out.

 

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Written by Sarah Ann

July 20, 2018 at 3:44 pm

30 Responses

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  1. One of those decisions that has no easy answer. Well written.

    Iain Kelly

    July 20, 2018 at 3:55 pm

    • Thank you. No, I’m not sure what decision I’d take in this situation – neither is a great option.

      Sarah Ann

      July 22, 2018 at 5:20 pm

  2. A well-written “end of days”

    neilmacdon

    July 20, 2018 at 4:22 pm

  3. The stuff of nightmares. A great read and response to the prompt

    ellenbest24

    July 20, 2018 at 4:56 pm

  4. What a sad scene. Very well written.

    Russell Gayer

    July 20, 2018 at 8:05 pm

    • Oh dear. I don’t like to think of you feeling sad Russell, but I am glad my story was affecting.

      Sarah Ann

      July 22, 2018 at 5:18 pm

  5. This story worked in many varied ways for me. Enjoyed the read

    michael1148humphris

    July 20, 2018 at 11:21 pm

  6. Liked the twist! At first i thought you were describing a fading person, and then it became clear “she” was the sun, herself. An empathetic apocalypse!

    4963andypop

    July 21, 2018 at 12:48 am

    • Thank you. I had hoped to give the impression of a person before clarifying it was the sun herself. Definitely an ending, this one.

      Sarah Ann

      July 22, 2018 at 5:17 pm

  7. My first though was some sort of solar event too, though I was thinking of it exploding. This is much better – a whimper rather than a shout.

    draliman

    July 21, 2018 at 6:04 am

    • There’s no such thing as better in terms of story ideas, just different. πŸ™‚ In a way, I think an exploding sun might be better for us, so we don’t know what’s coming.

      Sarah Ann

      July 22, 2018 at 5:16 pm

  8. better to wait and let nature takes its course. πŸ™‚

    plaridel

    July 21, 2018 at 7:35 am

    • I wonder how many would be content to let nature decide what happens to us in this situation. Thanks for the read.

      Sarah Ann

      July 22, 2018 at 5:14 pm

  9. Well done, Sarah Ann. A most difficult decision. To wait it out and hope or to just end it peacefully.

    Dale

    July 21, 2018 at 6:28 pm

    • I’m glad I won’t have to make that decision. At least I hope I won’t πŸ™‚

      Sarah Ann

      July 22, 2018 at 5:12 pm

  10. The sun went out. Poof. Like a candle. Really good image.

    granonine

    July 21, 2018 at 8:38 pm

  11. I like that some decided to stay and see what happens. Imaginative take.

    yarnspinnerr

    July 22, 2018 at 7:31 am

    • Thank you. I cannot imagine choosing to stay, but I can’t imagine suicide as an option either. Hopefully I will never encounter this scenario.

      Sarah Ann

      July 22, 2018 at 5:11 pm

  12. Dear Sarah Ann,

    Sad, bleak and imaginative take on the prompt.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

    rochellewisoff

    July 22, 2018 at 10:42 am

    • I’m not a miserable person, even though my stories seem to head that way. I’m am a cheerful soul. Honest!

      Sarah Ann

      July 22, 2018 at 5:10 pm

  13. Nice take on the prompt.

    sailajaP14

    July 22, 2018 at 2:00 pm

  14. Great twist.

    lisarey1990

    July 23, 2018 at 4:11 pm

  15. Chilling and dystopian.

    jillyfunnell

    July 23, 2018 at 4:38 pm

  16. Very well done. Seeing the inevitable end coming makes for interesting choices

    Laurie Bell

    July 24, 2018 at 11:50 pm


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