Sarah Ann Hall

Reporting on writing in progress or, more probably, not; practising flash fiction.

#FridayFictioneers – 29/6/18 – Top of the Pops

with 39 comments

Every Wednesday Rochelle Wisoff-Fields publishes a photo prompt to inspire writers to write 100-words of flash fiction or poetry.

At any point during the following week, the Friday Fictioneers post their 100-word tales. Read the other stories by clicking below.

With thanks to Rochelle for this week’s photo as well as hosting.

 

© Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

 

Top of the Pops

(General/ misery fiction: 100-words)

His room is as he left it. He’ll be back. He always comes back. Eventually.

It depends how things go, which is a useless catch-all, but that’s all he ever gives me.

So I wait. Hoping things go well. Hoping the unfinished score is one day completed. Which it will be when he gets his head together.

He stays with his girlfriend. It’s not as if he’s on the streets. But a mother worries. Always. The excuse of an artistic temperament doesn’t wash with me. I’ve always known him. He’s not bi-polar. The tests say so, but still I worry.

 

 

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Written by Sarah Ann

June 28, 2018 at 8:05 am

39 Responses

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  1. Great opening. It gives the story extension in time as well. as being a hook

    neilmacdon

    June 28, 2018 at 8:27 am

    • Thank you for your great comment. I laid the hook, but hadn’t grasped the time angle until you put it in such terms. I am not technically-minded or skilled at this writing lark at all.

      Sarah Ann

      June 29, 2018 at 9:19 am

  2. That “artistic temperament” dodge can work a couple of times; after that you need to find another excuse. This is a great take on the prompt. Well done and, thanks.

    tnkerr

    June 28, 2018 at 2:38 pm

    • Thank you. I believe there are some who try to get away with the artistic temperament thing all their lives. :0 Hopefully, this one will have things back on track soon.

      Sarah Ann

      June 29, 2018 at 9:13 am

  3. I’m with the mother…

    Dale

    June 28, 2018 at 7:02 pm

    • Some mothers do worry, about anything and everything, forever 🙂

      Sarah Ann

      June 29, 2018 at 9:14 am

  4. The mother’s curse, to always worry about their offspring. I hope when he gets his break he doesn’t forget her.

    Iain Kelly

    June 28, 2018 at 7:12 pm

    • I think he’ll be a good boy and look after his mum. And hopefully apologise for being such a worrisome child.

      Sarah Ann

      June 29, 2018 at 9:15 am

  5. I love how you drew me in to think it was his girlfriend then . . . Mom. Who knows their child better? Nicely done.

    Alicia Jamtaas

    June 29, 2018 at 3:59 am

    • Now that’s a question. A mother will always claim to know a child better because they’ve known them longest, but we keep on developing and maybe the girlfriend knows the future versions of him better than mum. As long as they both love and keep putting up with him, does it matter?

      Sarah Ann

      June 29, 2018 at 9:17 am

  6. A mother will always worry. Let’s hope he can sort himself out.

    draliman

    June 29, 2018 at 8:00 am

    • I think he will. And then I hope he apologises for being such a worry to her.

      Sarah Ann

      June 29, 2018 at 9:17 am

  7. My mother is in her 90’s and she still worries about me!

    Click to read my FriFic tale

    Keith's Ramblings

    June 29, 2018 at 1:22 pm

  8. Dear Sarah Ann,

    As the mother of three sons, I related. You never stop worrying. Ever. Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

    rochellewisoff

    June 29, 2018 at 2:08 pm

    • It’s good to know you related, not good to know you have so much to worry about. Forever. 🙂

      Sarah Ann

      July 3, 2018 at 11:35 am

  9. I like the surprise point of view nestled toward the end, too. But i also was interested in her reference to his diagnosis. Sometimes its the mother, who is kidding herself, not the child.

    4963andypop

    June 29, 2018 at 4:03 pm

    • Thank you. I think the mother might be clutching at straws. She doesn’t understand her child and there has to be a reason for that.

      Sarah Ann

      July 3, 2018 at 11:35 am

  10. I’ve seen people like this young man in my counseling office. Not much you can do but wait. Sometimes they never do get their heads on straight.

    granonine

    June 29, 2018 at 8:32 pm

    • I think we set too mcuh store by chronolgical age, and that loads on expectations. Some people just need longer to get themselves sorted and where they sit in the world.

      Sarah Ann

      July 3, 2018 at 11:30 am

  11. Great take, hopefully he will grow out of the artistic temperament which is a convenient cloak to hide behind and not accept responsibility for your actions. Only those that make it can afford to keep using the excuse so hopefully he’ll make it or change.

    michaelwynnauthor

    June 30, 2018 at 9:32 am

    • Thanks for that great comment. I’m sure there are plenty who don’t make it but carry on using the excuse. Maybe they’re the ones who run out of friends with any patience or belief in them.

      Sarah Ann

      July 3, 2018 at 11:29 am

  12. I would say that if he’s an adult, he has every right to mess up his own life. But then, I’m not a mother.

    anuragbakhshi

    June 30, 2018 at 10:42 am

    • Messing up his own life will have repercussions and I think she only wants the best for him. And oyu never know, giving him some space might help him fly.

      Sarah Ann

      July 3, 2018 at 11:27 am

  13. My wife is a worrier. In a perfect world, she’d find something to worry about. I think she finds a certain comfort in fussing other things of which she has no control.

    Russell Gayer

    June 30, 2018 at 2:52 pm

    • There’s plenty to worry about in a perfect world – like when it will all end. That constant worry woud be unbearable! 🙂

      Sarah Ann

      July 3, 2018 at 11:26 am

  14. I’m sure everything will work out well in the end. Great read.

    lisarey1990

    July 1, 2018 at 12:02 am

  15. Mother’s worry too much, don’t we? We can’t protect them from everything though we would like to, even knowing that they need to go through difficult times in order to grow and thrive.

    Fatima Fakier

    July 1, 2018 at 1:23 pm

    • Mum’s do worry too much. This one isn’t ready to cut the apron strings yet. At least she likes this girlfriend so isn’t on trying to break them up as well.

      Sarah Ann

      July 3, 2018 at 11:25 am

  16. perhaps he just needs some space. moms can be overbearing sometimes. 🙂

    plaridel

    July 2, 2018 at 7:01 am

    • I think he does need some space. Maybe if he explained things a bit better instead of just disappearing, his mum might worry less.

      Sarah Ann

      July 3, 2018 at 11:24 am

  17. I wonder if a mom every cease to worry… but maybe a boy with clear purpose should give more cause for concerns.

    • I believe mother’s never cease to worry. My m-i-l is in the dark about her children riding motorbikes because of her morbid fear of them. (She is never online so I can write that without worry of her reading and finding out.) You are right that the single minded are also, maybe a greater, worry.

      Sarah Ann

      July 3, 2018 at 11:23 am

  18. Symptoms of ADD or ADHD are often confused with symptoms of being bi-polar. She was reason to worry. You’ve created characters I an empathize with.
    Well dnne.

    Dawn M. Miller

    July 2, 2018 at 10:36 pm

    • Thank you Dawn. The idea of a diagnosis/ label came late in the story. Writing this from the mother’s POV I am still unsure whether the son has problems, or his mother over worries.

      Sarah Ann

      July 3, 2018 at 11:20 am

  19. The futility of it all. You can’t stop caring, you just keep on worrying. I couldn’t help but empathise, and that’s a good thing in a piece.

    Sandra

    July 3, 2018 at 11:20 am

    • Thank you. It’s true you can never stop worrying about those you love. Thank you for reading.

      Sarah Ann

      July 3, 2018 at 7:43 pm

  20. A mother always worries. Too true

    Laurie Bell

    July 4, 2018 at 9:45 pm


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