Sarah Ann Hall

Reporting on writing in progress or, more probably, not; practising flash fiction.

#FridayFictioneers – 12/1/18 – Marital Bliss

with 47 comments

Every Wednesday Rochelle Wisoff-Fields publishes a photo prompt to inspire writers to write 100-words of flash fiction or poetry.

At any point during the following week, the Friday Fictioneers post their 100-word tales. Read the other stories by clicking below.

I have struggled since Wednesday trying to come up with a story for this week’s photo. I thought specimens, scrutiny, being under examination, and then I showed the prompt to my other half and he saw the corner of a restaurant.

Thank you to Rochelle for hosting and Victor and Sarah Potter for this week’s photo.

 

© Victor and Sarah Potter

Marital Bliss

(Genre: general fiction; 100-words)

Months I’ve waited for this table. I told them it was a special occasion and they said they’d pull out all the stops at this fanciest place in town so my wife and I could celebrate our thirtieth anniversary in style. So why am I sitting at a table squeezed in between the toilet entrance and the fire exit? Talk about filthy. I wonder whether the spiders are de rigeur or an environmentally friendly form of cockroach prevention.

Thankfully the wine is good, as I will be drinking a lot of it. The wife’s in Antigua with my best friend.

 

 

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Written by Sarah Ann

January 12, 2018 at 3:12 pm

47 Responses

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  1. Oh dear. Not the evening out he expected from any angle. Nice one!

    draliman

    January 12, 2018 at 5:10 pm

    • No, this is definitely not what he was expecting. He’s not going to believe any reviews in the local paper ever again.

      Sarah Ann

      January 14, 2018 at 7:20 pm

  2. Now that’s someone who’s really down on their luck!

    Iain Kelly

    January 12, 2018 at 5:41 pm

    • He’ll recover, I’m sure. Especially as he has keys to his best friend’s house. While the cat’s away…

      Sarah Ann

      January 14, 2018 at 7:19 pm

  3. Oh dear – just goes to show you shouldn’t plan ahead!

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

    Susan A Eames

    January 12, 2018 at 7:11 pm

    • Or maybe communicate more clearly and not spring surprises on people?

      Sarah Ann

      January 14, 2018 at 7:19 pm

  4. Good story, well told. I liked the twist at the end.

    pennygadd51

    January 12, 2018 at 10:50 pm

    • Thanks Penny. It’s odd that I didn’t see this as a twist, but a sad end for one who’s been cuckolded.

      Sarah Ann

      January 14, 2018 at 7:18 pm

  5. Woah! Excellent twist. Did not see that coming at all.

    anuragbakhshi

    January 13, 2018 at 6:53 am

    • That’s good to hear. I didn’t know it was going to happen either. This is one story that wrote itself.

      Sarah Ann

      January 14, 2018 at 7:13 pm

      • They all do, don’t they? They have a life of their own.

        anuragbakhshi

        January 15, 2018 at 2:44 am

  6. Excellent tale. Loved the spiders as green techniques for pest control.

    yarnspinnerr

    January 13, 2018 at 8:20 am

    • Spiders do tend to get a bad press, so I wanted them to be seen in a positive light. However, the size of spider capable of taking on a cockroach would be one I’d run from.

      Sarah Ann

      January 14, 2018 at 7:13 pm

      • I looked it up and even normal house spiders do eat cockroaches. 🙂

        yarnspinnerr

        January 15, 2018 at 7:13 am

      • Thanks for letting me know. I leave spiders in place to eat flies. Thankfully there are no cockroaches locally…. at least I hope there aren’t!

        Sarah Ann

        January 15, 2018 at 2:11 pm

  7. Why DO restaurants treat single diners with such disdain? He’s better off without her, and might have brought a new lady here – not now!

    Liz Young

    January 13, 2018 at 5:33 pm

    • Love the way you turned this positive! Yep, they have definitely lost out on any future custom.

      Sarah Ann

      January 14, 2018 at 7:12 pm

  8. glad the wine is good- lol – felt the moment and the life unraveling –

    prior..

    January 13, 2018 at 5:40 pm

    • I don’t think he really cares, but good wine will ease his pain, in the short term.

      Sarah Ann

      January 14, 2018 at 7:11 pm

  9. I hope he does not get drunk, or give a huge tip, that is unless he fancy’s the waitress, or perhaps the waiter.🙂

    michael1148humphris

    January 14, 2018 at 1:41 am

    • I don’t think there’ll be a huge tip. Somehow I imagine he’s forgotten his wallet and he’s going to end up washing dishes… for weeks.

      Sarah Ann

      January 14, 2018 at 7:10 pm

  10. Dear Sarah Ann,

    What a place to spend an anniversary. I certainly didn’t expect the twist at the end. Good one.

    Shalom

    Rochelle

    rochellewisoff

    January 14, 2018 at 12:44 pm

    • I think the decor has been adjusted to match his mood. Or he’s exaggerating because life is suddenly scary and uncertain.

      Sarah Ann

      January 14, 2018 at 7:09 pm

  11. Nice twist at the end. Maybe he is luckier than what he thinks he is. Perhaps time to celebrate getting rid of the toxic element in his life.

    subroto

    January 14, 2018 at 12:48 pm

    • Perhaps. His wife’s infidelity came as a bit of a shock, and disappointment.

      Sarah Ann

      January 14, 2018 at 7:08 pm

  12. Great title for the piece. I read that a vegan bar has opened up in London; maybe they use the same marketing consultant.
    I wonder how the Antigua assignment went.

    patrickprinsloo

    January 14, 2018 at 9:02 pm

    • I think the wife will return from Antigua disappointed. She’s reached an age when she’s hard to please.

      Sarah Ann

      January 15, 2018 at 2:15 pm

  13. The twelfth anniversary must have been good. Unlucky thirteen I guess. Good story Sarah.

    Dan Bohn

    January 14, 2018 at 9:14 pm

  14. I have heard that food-poisoning is common in Antigua… hope they catch it.

    Björn Rudberg (brudberg)

    January 14, 2018 at 9:44 pm

  15. Well that blows… make arrangements, have wife out frolicking with best friend and to top it all off… the arrangements turn out to be crap… I feel it can only go up from there for the poor bloke.

    Dale

    January 14, 2018 at 10:41 pm

    • Let’s hope so. Someone suggested he might take one the waiting staff home. I think they might be carrying him instead.

      Sarah Ann

      January 15, 2018 at 2:14 pm

      • That might very well be…

        Dale

        January 15, 2018 at 4:56 pm

  16. Oh no… that last line was a killer! Poor bloke. I hope at least the food is good

    Laurie Bell

    January 15, 2018 at 4:15 am

    • The jury’s out on that one… he drank too much to remember.

      Sarah Ann

      January 15, 2018 at 2:12 pm

  17. And just when I thought it can’t get worse – you pull in that last sentence. Good one!

    Eric Alagan

    January 15, 2018 at 3:30 pm

    • Thank you. At least he’s at rock bottom now. Unless he goes home to find the house had burnt down…

      Sarah Ann

      January 16, 2018 at 8:38 pm

  18. Well, after all that waiting you came up with a winner! Great twist at the end 🙂

    granonine

    January 15, 2018 at 5:49 pm

    • Thank you. When the ideas come the writing follows… it’s just the ideas can be slow sometimes.

      Sarah Ann

      January 16, 2018 at 8:35 pm

  19. What a terribly terrible wife!
    Great storytelling, Sarah!

    Moon

    January 16, 2018 at 11:52 am

    • She doesn’t think so. I wonder if the best friend will see her with new eyes after their trip.

      Sarah Ann

      January 16, 2018 at 8:36 pm

  20. I believe I would have canceled the reservation. There are cheaper places to drink.

    rgayer55

    January 16, 2018 at 4:12 pm

    • He wanted to know what he’d been missing out on. He can always brag to the soon-to-be-ex-wife that he’s been and she hasn’t.

      Sarah Ann

      January 16, 2018 at 8:36 pm

  21. Uh, oh. I wonder how long the affair has been going on. That’s rough when it’s been thirty years. Good writing, Sarah Ann. —- Suzanne

    patriciaruthsusan

    January 17, 2018 at 10:40 am

    • Thank you. I think the affair has only been on a short while, and think it might be very short lived.

      Sarah Ann

      January 17, 2018 at 11:27 pm


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