Sarah Ann Hall

Reporting on writing in progress or, more probably, not.

#FridayFictioneers – 22/12/17 – The Crystal Caves

with 25 comments

Every Wednesday Rochelle Wisoff-Fields publishes a photo prompt to inspire writers to write 100-words of flash fiction or poetry.

At any point during the following week, the Friday Fictioneers post their 100-word tales. Read the other stories by clicking below.

Thank you to Rochelle for hosting and Björn for this week’s photo. Happy Christmas everyone. I will get round to reading and commenting, but imagine I’ll be even later than usual over the coming days….

 

 

The Crystal Caves

(Genre: you decide; 100-words)

‘Twas a spectacular sight: light shining, bouncing, dancing.

Health and safety dictated: Everyone entering the cavern must wear a hardhat.

Visitors were counted in and out by hats returned.

‘There are 15 missing this month,’ Sergei said.

‘We must stop people going in.’

‘We don’t advertise. I’ve taken the signposts down. Word about its beauty still spreads.’

‘We’ll close; lock the gates.’

‘People would break in, take souvenirs. It might take more of them.’

‘At least I wouldn’t know how many had gone.’

Erica finally understood her parents’ reluctance to expand the generations old family business, and mourned their disappearance.

 

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Written by Sarah Ann

December 22, 2017 at 4:17 pm

25 Responses

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  1. There’s something terrible lurking in the depths. Nice one!

    draliman

    December 22, 2017 at 5:22 pm

    • Thank you. Are you able to enlighten me on what’s lurking? I’m at a loss, and not going further in to find out!

      Sarah Ann

      December 26, 2017 at 2:58 pm

      • Probably best to live in ignorance 🙂

        draliman

        December 26, 2017 at 5:34 pm

  2. Wondering what the dead-end might be!
    Great story, Sarah!

    Moon

    December 22, 2017 at 6:17 pm

  3. Mysterious and unexplained disappearances in the caves, I love it! 🙂

    Iain Kelly

    December 23, 2017 at 12:41 am

    • Glad you like it. I’m not sure what’s going on down there, and don’t want to find out.

      Sarah Ann

      December 26, 2017 at 3:04 pm

  4. Dear Sarah Ann,

    Sounds like an ominous business to be in. But then again, ‘crystal caves’ do sound enticing. Nicely done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

    rochellewisoff

    December 23, 2017 at 12:55 am

    • The crystal caves are very enticing, a sight to behold indeed, just one with a sting in the tale for some. 😉

      Sarah Ann

      December 26, 2017 at 2:59 pm

  5. Oooh, the mysterious crystal caves. I am seeing hundreds of people standing in different places in the caves, mesmerized by the beautiful crystals, unable to move a muscle.

    anuragbakhshi

    December 23, 2017 at 6:52 am

    • That’s a great image, thank you. You’ve given me something else to think about 🙂

      Sarah Ann

      December 26, 2017 at 3:05 pm

  6. Very sinister, the guardian of the crystals rules the caves. Great take!

    Sandra

    December 23, 2017 at 12:52 pm

  7. You chose a different path. Brilliant.

    yarnspinnerr

    December 23, 2017 at 4:22 pm

    • Thank you. Bjorn’s hats looked so warm and woolly, I’m not sure why I chose a cold tale to write. The muse is a complicated thing.

      Sarah Ann

      December 26, 2017 at 3:00 pm

  8. Being lost inside those caves sounds like a terrible end… I think they have to close it really good.

    Björn Rudberg (brudberg)

    December 23, 2017 at 9:58 pm

    • I’ve not yet worked out whether the guardian of the caves will get more aggressive and breakout if his food supply is cut off….

      Sarah Ann

      December 26, 2017 at 3:19 pm

  9. Love that you went way outside of the box! There is something sinister going on…

    Dale

    December 24, 2017 at 5:42 am

    • It was the number of hats took me outside the box – who needs that many/ how could you ever sell that many? And once I was counting…. there seemed to be some missing.

      Sarah Ann

      December 26, 2017 at 3:02 pm

  10. Very clever and creative, Sarah Ann. You really left us hanging and thirsting for more. Well done.

    rgayer55

    December 26, 2017 at 2:45 pm

    • Thank you Russell for such a lovely and encouraging comment.

      Sarah Ann

      December 26, 2017 at 3:19 pm

  11. Oh dear. Genre: Horror! Well done.

    granonine

    December 26, 2017 at 3:40 pm

  12. Ooooooooooo such mystery has me hooked. What is down there? creepy and well told

    Laurie Bell

    December 28, 2017 at 10:49 am


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