Sarah Ann Hall

Reporting on writing in progress or, more probably, not.

#FridayFictioneers – 16/6/17 – Holiday Romance

with 37 comments

Every Wednesday Rochelle Wisoff-Fields publishes a photo prompt to inspire writers to write 100-words of flash fiction or poetry.

At any point during the following week, the Friday Fictioneers post their 100-word tales. Read the other stories by clicking below.

Thanks to Rochelle for hosting and Dale for the photo. The below isn’t as polished as I’d like, but editing has not come easily.

 

© Dale Rogerson

Holiday Romance

(Genre: speculative fiction; 100-words)

She came from the ocean, slipped through the shadows. In breath-stealing humidity, flesh clammy, she tasted of salt. Lips full, muscles strong, limbs sinewy, we twisted in beach and surf. She was the best night of my life. We will never repeat, I can never forget.

I travel every coastline, drink Peroni, eat calamari, stare at the moon, just as I did that night. I imagine I catch the scent of her sea-filled hair, feel the air shift around her curvaceous form. I search, am disappointed, search again. The memory is not enough. Desire, and surely madness, drives me on.

 

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Written by Sarah Ann

June 16, 2017 at 10:05 pm

37 Responses

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  1. Sounds like he’s hooked. This obsession could be his undoing.

    draliman

    June 17, 2017 at 8:43 am

  2. Who doesn’t love a tale of romantic madness? You did this very well

    neilmacdon

    June 17, 2017 at 9:04 am

  3. There’s an air of desperation in your words. Onwards and upwards!

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    Keith's Ramblings

    June 17, 2017 at 11:00 am

  4. Oh! My favorite this week. Lovely, just lovely.

    Alicia Jamtaas

    June 17, 2017 at 3:08 pm

  5. This was wonderful! She sure lured him in. Could you imagine having a guy pine for you like that?

    Dale

    June 17, 2017 at 4:56 pm

    • Thank you. She sure did. And no, I can never imagine anyone feeling that way about me. 😉

      Sarah Ann

      June 17, 2017 at 10:50 pm

  6. Wouldn’t you just love to be that captivating!

    granonine

    June 17, 2017 at 9:19 pm

  7. Powerful writing, yes powerful.

    michael1148humphris

    June 17, 2017 at 11:48 pm

  8. Overpowering passion wonderfully conveyed through few words.

    yarnspinnerr

    June 18, 2017 at 1:47 pm

    • Thank you. The first draft of this story was was all passion and short – I had to pad with food and moon-staring to get to 100-words.

      Sarah Ann

      June 19, 2017 at 11:13 am

  9. the story didn’t mention what he had been smoking. well-written, though.

    plaridel

    June 18, 2017 at 5:13 pm

    • Each to his own weed. 🙂 I’m not sure either. Maybe it was something in the air. Thanks for reading.

      Sarah Ann

      June 19, 2017 at 11:11 am

  10. This is like it’s drawn from the obsession of the selkie… I think she’s still out there, but she will never be caught… love this.

    • Thank you, Björn. You got it exactly. I imagined he’d paired up with a mermaid for the evening.

      Sarah Ann

      June 19, 2017 at 11:15 am

  11. His desire and desperation really come through. Beautifully written.

    amiewrites74

    June 18, 2017 at 11:53 pm

    • Thank you. Some stories decide to write themselves – this was one of those.

      Sarah Ann

      June 19, 2017 at 11:16 am

  12. Your descritive words had me right there in the beach. A temptress unaware of the power
    she holds over a man who will search, it seems, forever. Loved this story …
    Isadora 😎

  13. Wonderful way to show the power of addiction.

  14. Amazing !

    Moon

    June 19, 2017 at 10:36 am

  15. I may be out of line here, but when I first read it, I thought it was a she and not a he. Love transcends all – does it not.
    Peace,
    Eric

    Eric Alagan

    June 19, 2017 at 11:04 am

    • Hi Eric. I wrote it from a male POV but re-reading from with a female’s POV it works equally well. Love and desire are all powerful.

      Sarah Ann

      June 19, 2017 at 11:19 am

  16. Sound like he met a mermaid. His desire for her comes through, nicely done.

    subroto

    June 19, 2017 at 11:51 am

  17. Dear Sarah Ann,

    Aw, Subroto beat me to it. I was thinking mermaid. 😉 I don’t think you have anything to apologize for re editing or polish. It’s perfect just the way it is. 😀

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

    rochellewisoff

    June 19, 2017 at 3:06 pm

    • Thank you Rochelle. This was one of those stories that wouldn’t allow me to tweak it, however hard I tried.

      Sarah Ann

      June 19, 2017 at 7:27 pm

  18. Mysterious, once-in-a-lifetime romantic encounter. Now only memories are left as she has returned to the sea.

    James

    June 19, 2017 at 9:31 pm

  19. A great description of a romantic obsession, Sarah Ann Good writing. 🙂 — Suzanne

    patriciaruthsusan

    June 21, 2017 at 9:01 am


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