Sarah Ann Hall

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#FridayFictioneers – 19/5/17 – Fixtures and Fittings

with 26 comments

Every Wednesday Rochelle Wisoff-Fields publishes a photo prompt to inspire writers to write 100-words of flash fiction or poetry.

At any point during the following week, the Friday Fictioneers post their 100-word tales. Read the other stories by clicking below.

As usual, it took a while for any ideas to form, and then I came up with the below. Is this a story? Perhaps more of a vingette. Does it work? Let me know.

Thanks to Rochelle for hosting and Roger Butolt for this week’s photo.

© Roger Butolt

 

Fixtures and Fittings

(Genre: general fiction; 100-words)

‘Why do we always come here?’

‘It’s where we had our first date.’

‘And our last.’

‘They know us.’

‘We love the food.’

‘They leave us alone and don’t mind us poring over paperwork.’

‘And the coffee’s good.’

‘And the coffee’s good!’

‘We should try somewhere else.’

‘It wouldn’t be as comfortable.’

‘Which is why we should make the effort.’

‘Maybe.’

‘You’re too non-committal.’

‘You’re too rigid.’

‘Here we go.’

‘And that’s another thing going for his place; they don’t mind our arguments.’

‘There’s something I need to say.’

‘Me too.’

‘I don’t want us to get divorced.’

‘Me either.’

 

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Written by Sarah Ann

May 19, 2017 at 2:14 pm

26 Responses

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  1. Ha, they sound perfect for each other 🙂 Nice realistic dialogue.

    draliman

    May 19, 2017 at 2:54 pm

    • Let’s hope they are and don’t regret their latest decision. Thanks for reading.

      Sarah Ann

      May 19, 2017 at 9:25 pm

  2. Great dialogue, reads like a scene from a play. Excellent.

    Iain Kelly

    May 19, 2017 at 5:10 pm

  3. Such a romantic love story in 100 words! Lovely💗

    LucciaGray

    May 19, 2017 at 9:59 pm

    • Thank you. Romance wasn’t the first thing I thought of as I wrote, so it’s nice to know it had that effect too.

      Sarah Ann

      May 22, 2017 at 10:04 am

      • Well two people who obviously had been together for a long time, split up and now both decide they’re prepared to invest time and effort in giving each other a second chance sounds very romantic to me ❤

        LucciaGray

        May 22, 2017 at 12:55 pm

      • Fair enough. When you put it like that, I have to agree 🙂

        Sarah Ann

        May 22, 2017 at 7:54 pm

      • I’m an incurable romantic ❤. I can’t help it!

        LucciaGray

        May 22, 2017 at 9:26 pm

  4. I’m glad they agree on something. I enjoyed the dialogue too. Well done.

    rgayer55

    May 19, 2017 at 10:12 pm

    • Agreeing on the little things is important if they’re to carry on getting along. 🙂

      Sarah Ann

      May 22, 2017 at 10:05 am

  5. Oh, they shouldn’t! These two belong together. 😀

    Christine Goodnough

    May 20, 2017 at 3:23 am

  6. Made for each other. Great write.

    yarnspinnerr

    May 20, 2017 at 2:17 pm

  7. Not their first time with any of this! Love this moment between the two of them. The last line changes it in a nice way.

    Emily Livingstone

    May 20, 2017 at 8:18 pm

    • No, I feel these two have been going round in circles for a while. Glad the last line changes it for you.

      Sarah Ann

      May 22, 2017 at 10:06 am

  8. Great dialogue and nice turn around at the end. They chose the place well as neither of them wanted divorce, I think it helped them stay together

    Michael Wynn

    May 21, 2017 at 2:29 pm

    • Thank you. I’m never sure on last minute turns, so happy to hear it works.

      Sarah Ann

      May 22, 2017 at 10:09 am

  9. Love it….I guess they can focus on eating instead of paper work

  10. Very realistic dialogue that played out well to the touching last two lines.

    Life Lessons of a Dog Lover

    May 21, 2017 at 7:51 pm

    • Thank you for your great comment. I’m happy to know the dialogue worked and that the ending worked.

      Sarah Ann

      May 22, 2017 at 10:08 am

  11. Dear Sarah Ann,

    Touching and satisfying resolution to a realistic conversation. A healthy portion of good job!”

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

    rochellewisoff

    May 22, 2017 at 3:01 pm

  12. A story with all dialogue is a great story. I’m glad they’re not getting divorced. Good writing, Sarah Ann. 🙂 — Suzanne

    patriciaruthsusan

    May 23, 2017 at 4:27 pm


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