Sarah Ann Hall

Reporting on writing in progress or, more probably, not.

#FridayFictioneers – 2/10/15 – Raw

with 20 comments

Every Wednesday Rochelle Wisoff-Fields publishes a photo prompt to inspire writers to write 100-words of flash fiction or poetry.

At any point during the following week, the Friday Fictioneers post their 100-word tales. Read the other stories by clicking below.

(No pretty froggy today.)

 

It’s ages since I’ve participated, but I hope to be able to stick around now I’m back. As I’ve been missing for so long, my writing skills will be rusty, so constructive comments are appreciated.

 

 

PHOTO PROMPT - © Marie Gail Stratford

PHOTO PROMPT – © Marie Gail Stratford

 

 

Raw (Genre: general fiction; 100-words)

There’s a photo on my wall of children giggling. It’s so vibrant that, after 30 years, I have no memory of what made them laugh, but still smile.

The pair are on the left, sunlight from the right fingering their hair. But this isn’t artfully cropped. It is raw, shot on 126mm film by my brother when photography still held surprises. We’re in the garden, taking advantage of the last days of summer.

It was three years before the film was processed. No one could explain why it hadn’t melted in the fire. He is gone; his skills remain, exposed.

 

 

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Written by Sarah Ann

October 2, 2015 at 3:43 pm

20 Responses

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  1. Dear Sarah Ann,

    It’s good to see you back. .I don’t think you have to worry about your skills being rusty. Your well written story is a novel in a hundred words. The last line is a masterpiece.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

    rochellewisoff

    October 2, 2015 at 6:00 pm

    • Hi Rochelle,
      You don’t half know how to give a girl a boost. I wasn’t sure the last line wasn’t a little too trite. Thank you for affirming the opposite.

      Sarah Ann

      October 2, 2015 at 7:38 pm

  2. Beautifully written. Tragic and real.

    Dale

    October 2, 2015 at 6:46 pm

  3. I agree with Rochelle. What rust? So much here to ponder, Sarah. Nicely, crafted story. Welcome back!!

    Amy Reese

    October 2, 2015 at 6:56 pm

    • Maybe I’m confusing rust and wrinkles? Thank you Amy, for your comment and the welcome back. It’s good to know there’s much to ponder. This started at 150 words and lots more ideas, but was infinitely improved by the paring back.

      Sarah Ann

      October 2, 2015 at 7:40 pm

      • I could see how there could be a whole story built on ideas you’ve started here. There’s a lot here to work with. Great job!

        Amy Reese

        October 2, 2015 at 7:43 pm

  4. Great to see you back, I think you story is excellent, tells so much outside the borders of the story.

    Björn Rudberg (brudberg)

    October 2, 2015 at 7:15 pm

    • By the way, you might want to know that we have a monthly haibun challenge at dVerse.. The next prompt is up on Monday this week.

      Björn Rudberg (brudberg)

      October 2, 2015 at 7:16 pm

      • Thanks for the heads up – I will take a look.

        Sarah Ann

        October 5, 2015 at 10:22 pm

    • Thank you Björn. The idea of heads being chopped off in photos came to mind when I first saw Marie gail’s photo and the story grew from there. There is so much I don’t know about these characters and their story so good to know it conveys that feeling.

      Sarah Ann

      October 2, 2015 at 7:48 pm

  5. Lovely story. I enjoyed the punch at the end. Well done.

    Fuzzy Panda Barista

    October 3, 2015 at 8:25 pm

  6. Beautifully done.

    k rawson

    October 4, 2015 at 2:16 pm

  7. Beautiful story with a heartbreaking twist.

    gahlearner

    October 4, 2015 at 9:54 pm

  8. welcome back. touching story. Randy

    The Writer's Village

    October 5, 2015 at 2:15 am

  9. A poignant piece: well done.

    micklively

    October 5, 2015 at 7:41 am

  10. Welcome back./ Intriguing story. Film is so flammable – it’s the hand of god giving you those memories.

    Patrick Prinsloo

    October 5, 2015 at 9:28 am

  11. Welcome back. Good story, and not a bit rusty. Sad and realistic. Well done. —- Suzanne

    Suzanne Joshi

    October 6, 2015 at 12:37 pm


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