Sarah Ann Hall

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#FridayFictioneers – 30/1/15 – Doing the Wrong Thing

with 31 comments

Every Wednesday Rochelle Wisoff-Fields publishes a photo prompt to inspire writers to write 100-words of flash fiction or poetry.

At any point during the following week, the Friday Fictioneers post their 100-word tales. Read the other stories by clicking below.

 

There is an unformed story in my head related to Frankenstein’s monster – it’s got something to do with plugs and switches. I gave up on that one and worked with what I think Ted’s picture is of – a kiln.

I hope this translates, but have left a link for those who have different words for these things.

 

Copyright – Ted Strutz

 

Doing the Wrong Thing

(Genre: humour; 100-words)

Halfway through show and tell, Maria skipped to the front, blonde plaits swinging. Miss. Tregold prayed she didn’t trip.

‘My grandma is a potty,’ Maria said, holding up a vase of green swirls.

Maria was a confident child. Admonishment led to clenched fists and hamster cheeks, bulbous tears and wailing.

‘You mean nuts,’ Jason sniggered.

‘No I don’t. She made this,’ Maria brandished the vase, ‘on her potty’s wheel.’

‘It’s beautiful,’ Miss. Tregold said.

Maria beamed. So did Miss. Tregold. Fridays were draining enough without one of Maria’s tantrums. Someone else could remind her about the importance of word endings.

 

Friday Fictioneers

 

What Maria didn’t mean, but Miss. Tregold thought.

 

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  1. Aw, bless her 🙂

    draliman

    January 30, 2015 at 2:42 pm

  2. Oh I just know how that teacher must feel. Sweet one!

    Sandra

    January 30, 2015 at 3:34 pm

  3. Miss Tregold certainly has the knack. But not Jason. (And creature, not monster, please.)

    patrickprinsloo

    January 30, 2015 at 6:38 pm

    • No, Jason isn’t the nicest or brightest. I think he secretly fancies Maria, which is what all his goading is about. Apologies to the creature – the other word just slipped out.

      Sarah Ann

      February 2, 2015 at 4:26 pm

  4. clenched fists and hamster cheeks, bulbous tears and wailing. Boy does this say it all.
    P.S. No need for a period after MIss

    aliciajamtaas

    January 30, 2015 at 8:10 pm

    • I’m glad it says it all. I was trying to get in the red face as well, but gave up. Thanks for the . advice – I think that’s a hang-up of mine from school and being taught how to address envelopes.

      Sarah Ann

      February 2, 2015 at 4:28 pm

  5. A kiln? Is that what this is? Oh, thank you for clearing that up, Sarah. I’ve been at a loss, not it matters since it’s all what YOU see. This is a great take! I think the teacher is absolutely right. Sometimes you must let things be. Great description of her with clenched fists and bulbous tears. I can see her. Oh, poor thing!

    Amy Reese

    January 30, 2015 at 8:54 pm

    • Thanks Amy. I’m glad you can see her. Thankfully we don’t have to hear her as well. 🙂

      Sarah Ann

      February 2, 2015 at 4:24 pm

  6. I just read Ted’s story and yes it is a kiln.. Love your description of Maria.. I would say thread gently round a firecracker like that.

    Björn Rudberg (brudberg)

    January 30, 2015 at 11:15 pm

    • Definitely tread gently. She has a bit of temper and likes being right, in all things.

      Sarah Ann

      February 2, 2015 at 4:25 pm

  7. Sweet little girl and so misunderstood. 🙂 Loved the story!

    Priceless Joy

    January 31, 2015 at 1:00 am

    • Thank you. Glad you enjoyed it. So is Maria – more wilful than misunderstood I think.

      Sarah Ann

      February 2, 2015 at 4:28 pm

  8. Cute. 🙂

    adamjasonp

    February 1, 2015 at 1:41 am

  9. Lovely story. What tales teachers of this age group must have. Loved your description of Maria. I was confused as to why Miss Trent prayed she wouldn’t trip. Perhaps putting the vase in that paragraph would clarify that. Although perhaps it is a good hook not to know.

    • Thanks for your comment. I didn’t want to talk about the vase too much, and hoped it coming in the next line was enough. That’s one of the problems with so few words to play with.

      Sarah Ann

      February 2, 2015 at 4:30 pm

      • I agree with you there, but doesn’t it hone your skills, making you use strong active verbs and getting rid of all the unnecessary adjectives and adverbs. Tends to make for a strong piece of writing.

  10. Dear Sarah Ann, Now, a kiln makes sense. Good job! Nan 🙂

    Nan Falkner

    February 1, 2015 at 8:42 am

  11. I had no idea this was a Kiln! The more you know…
    Anyway, nice tale. Looks like it was written by someone who has experience with toddlers & young kids. 🙂
    Cheers
    KT

    wildbilbo

    February 2, 2015 at 2:17 am

    • Thanks for the compliment – my experience with this age group is limited to nephews, so not huge in time, but greatly educative 🙂

      Sarah Ann

      February 2, 2015 at 4:31 pm

  12. That missing syllable makes a difference, haha! I think Maria sounds quite entertaining 🙂

    jannatwrites

    February 2, 2015 at 3:10 am

    • She is that, but you have to have lots of sleep to cope with her. Thanks for reading and taking the time to comment!

      Sarah Ann

      February 2, 2015 at 4:31 pm

  13. A wonderful description of Maria in a tantrum. Fun dialogue. And yes – Friday is definitely not the day to make a stand on small matters in the classroom.

    Margaret

    February 2, 2015 at 11:58 am

    • I’m glad the tantrum worked. Never having had one myself, I had to work hard to imagine what one looked like 🙂

      Sarah Ann

      February 2, 2015 at 4:32 pm

  14. As we say here in the South (when someone is not too bright), “Bless her little heart.”
    At first, I thought Maria might have Grandma’s ashes in an urn. I’m glad it turned out not to be a chamber pot. That could have been a smelly situation. This one made me smile, Sarah Ann. 🙂

    rgayer55

    February 2, 2015 at 12:49 pm

    • I think we have to bless Maria, often. But she provides much entertainment for family and friends. Thanks for reading.

      Sarah Ann

      February 2, 2015 at 4:33 pm

  15. Dear Sarah Ann,

    Maria is a little charmer and so is your story. I loved it from top to bottom.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

    rochellewisoff

    February 2, 2015 at 11:38 pm

  16. Cute story and wise teacher. Why ask for trouble. Well done, Sarah Ann. In the school where I used to teach 1st Grade, one of the little boys in my class, whose family had moved there from the mountains, brought a squirrel rifle for Show and Tell one day. The principal took and kept it until the end of the school day. 🙂 — Suzanne

    Suzanne Joshi

    February 4, 2015 at 8:43 am


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