Sarah Ann Hall

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#FridayFictioneers – 16/1/15 – One Day

with 26 comments

 

Every Wednesday Rochelle Wisoff-Fields publishes a photo prompt to inspire writers to write 100-words of flash fiction or poetry.

At any point during the following week, the Friday Fictioneers post their 100-word tales. Read the other stories by clicking below.

 

I can’t believe it’s five weeks since I took part in Friday Fictioneers. It’s safe to say I haven’t got back into the swing of blogging and reading since the Christmas break. And now something VERY ODD has happened. I haven’t had a WordPress ‘New post’ email from anyone since 8th Jan. I’m slightly foxed and don’t seem able to fix it.

[Quite soon after posting, I found the problem. Emails and new post notifications back to normal. :)]

 

 

I felt a huge sense of sadness looking at Jan’s beautiful photo, hence this week’s tale, which isn’t great – it shows how out of practice I am.

 

Copyright – Jan Wayne Fields

Copyright – Jan Wayne Fields

 

One Day

(Genre: misery lit: 99-words)

Harry lays the table every 15th September. One year he knows his in-laws will come to share his meal.

Estella had wanted an engagement party and big announcement, but agreed telling their parents individually and first would be kinder. His parents were thrilled; hers never heard.

Wanting everything to be perfect, Estella was riffling in the airing cupboard for matching napkins when –

Estella was loaded into the ambulance as her parents arrived; they followed to the hospital.

Sepsis seeped in through scalded skin; days later organs failed.

Estella’s parents organised her funeral. Harry wasn’t invited to contribute.

Still he hopes.

 

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Written by Sarah Ann

January 16, 2015 at 2:46 pm

26 Responses

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  1. I felt sadness too when I saw the photo, we both went in the same direction. Welcome back to FF 🙂

    draliman

    January 16, 2015 at 3:15 pm

    • We did go in the same direction, but yours is so much better than mine! Thanks for reading and the welcome back.

      Sarah Ann

      January 16, 2015 at 8:56 pm

      • Not true! You really made me feel for Harry, not only losing Estella but being prevented contributing afterwards as well.

        draliman

        January 18, 2015 at 11:06 am

      • Thanks you. Now if I only I could recognised how I did that, I’d be laughing. When it comes to analysing writing, mine or anyone else’s, and what works or doesn’t, I’m useless.

        Sarah Ann

        January 19, 2015 at 12:08 pm

  2. What a really sad story. The prompt this week has certainly attracted more than a few trips down the path of melancholy. Well done and welcome back. Have you checked to see whether you’re still following the people you’re expecting ‘new posts’ from. The mysteries of WordPress have me foxed too but sometimes I’ve found if I log out and log back in again (to WordPress) things seem to re-set themselves. That suggestion, together with switching the computer off and back on again, are the sole extent of my techie skills, I’m afraid.

    Sandra

    January 17, 2015 at 12:04 pm

    • Thanks Sandra for the welcome back and the well done.
      All fixed in the world of emails. Somehow all WP emails had been blocked. Have no idea how, but all back to normal now.

      Sarah Ann

      January 18, 2015 at 8:45 pm

  3. Wow, that is full of misery! But welcome back anyway. 🙂 WP can be so weird sometimes and then suddenly will be just fine (or have changed completely, you never know.) Sept. 15 is our anniversary. Hope that’s not a bad omen for our 31st this year!

    janet

    sustainabilitea

    January 17, 2015 at 5:57 pm

    • I wasn’t planning on coming back full of misery, although I find it easier to write than upbeat stories. Not sure what that says as I’m a happy person.
      Now you’ve given me plenty of notice, but I’m still nor sure I’ll remember your anniversary 🙂

      Sarah Ann

      January 18, 2015 at 8:49 pm

  4. I feel extremely sad after reading this. I wonder why Harry wasn’t ask to contribute, and if her parents blame him. These things happen with sudden deaths and people hold on to anger. Glad you got your emails figured out. Welcome back! I enjoyed your story very much. 🙂

    Amy Reese

    January 17, 2015 at 8:38 pm

    • Thanks Amy. I don’t think Estella’s parents blame Harry, they just forgot how much he meant to her. The death of a child can be so overwhelming that brothers, sisters, lovers etc and their feelings get overlooked.

      Sarah Ann

      January 18, 2015 at 8:51 pm

  5. Dear Sarah Ann,

    It’s wonderful to see you back. I hope you had a good holiday, though.

    What a sad story.Like Amy, I had the feeling that Harry’s parents blamed him which makes the story twice as tragic. nicely done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

    rochellewisoff

    January 17, 2015 at 10:05 pm

    • Hi Rochelle,
      Thank you for the welcome back and you comment. I hadn’t planned for Estella’s parents to blame Harry, but there might be an irrational, ‘if she hadn’t been with him,’ thought floating about. That’s the beauty of comments – they make me think and see my stories in a different way.

      Sarah Ann

      January 18, 2015 at 8:54 pm

  6. Oh, so very sad! It’s easy to blame those closest when sorrow strikes. I hope her parents can come around and give Harry so comfort.

    Lily

    hafong

    January 18, 2015 at 1:06 am

    • I hope so too. Time heals, so hopefully after enough passes they will be able to comfort each other and remember Estella together. Thanks for reading.

      Sarah Ann

      January 18, 2015 at 8:55 pm

  7. Oh Sarah, do not say yours isn’t as good as someone else’s. You brought a tear to me. x

    ramblingsfromamum

    January 18, 2015 at 12:24 pm

    • Hi Jen and thank you. The last thing I want to do is make your cry 🙂 Am very behind as usual in my reading – catch up day tomorrow. x

      Sarah Ann

      January 18, 2015 at 8:56 pm

  8. Oh my goodness, that is such a tragic story. And you may think you’re out of practice, but I thought this was well done.

    jannatwrites

    January 18, 2015 at 10:21 pm

    • Thank you Janna. I didn’t know whether the gap in the middle – the lack of explanation about what happened – left this piece hanging. It’s good to know the emotion was enough to carry it.

      Sarah Ann

      January 19, 2015 at 12:06 pm

  9. Quite a lot was said in this pieced, and not said. Leaving much up to the reader’s imagination. Well done.

    aliciajamtaas

    January 19, 2015 at 3:38 am

    • I wasn’t sure that leaving out what happened in the airing cupboard might be too much, and then wondered whether there was enough detail after to allow the reader to imagine what might have happened. It’s good to know it did work. Thank you.

      Sarah Ann

      January 19, 2015 at 12:05 pm

  10. How like life – we go bubbling along making wonderful plans, and it can all just disappear in an instant. Scary. Your characters are so true to life – it’s so sad the parents overlooked him, being so overcome in their grief. Well told.

    Margaret

    January 19, 2015 at 8:37 am

    • Thank you so much for your comment. It is really encouraging to hear that the characters came across as real. It’s difficult to know whether the characters I write are as fully-formed for the reader, so it’s good to know.

      Sarah Ann

      January 20, 2015 at 9:16 pm

  11. How unkind of the “in-laws?” I thought they were announcing the engagement when this happened. How horrible and sad. I hope the parents get over their bitterness and realize that their daughter was happy at the time. Great story! Nan

    Nan Falkner

    January 20, 2015 at 9:08 pm

    • Hopefully the parents will mellow as the shock of their loss dissipates. Grief makes people behave in different ways, not all of them good.

      Sarah Ann

      January 20, 2015 at 9:18 pm

  12. Welcome back, Sara Ann. This was a sad but realistic story. These things happen, but they shouldn’t. The person or people who lack forgiveness are really hurting themselves. Good description and well done. — Suzanne

    Suzanne Joshi

    January 21, 2015 at 6:04 am


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