Sarah Ann Hall

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Mediterranean Summer – #gargleblaster185

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Tacking to starboard, the crew luxuriated in warmth and jollity. Through kissing winds their sail sliced the blue. All around sea met sky, nothing else in sight.

Thump.

Lurch.

Arms flailed, glasses flew.

As the deck righted, none noticed their red wake.

 




 

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Written by Sarah Ann

October 29, 2014 at 8:47 pm

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  1. Thanks to Nate for his Expresso Shots in the coffeehouse this week. I tried to incorporate domain-specific vocabulary to place my story this week. Let me know what you see.

    Sarah Ann

    October 29, 2014 at 8:54 pm

  2. I am so pathetic, I can’t see anything, other than what I read, domain specific vocabulary? Well um in a sail boat, on the ocean..um err.. That’s all I got lol.

    ramblingsfromamum

    October 29, 2014 at 10:49 pm

  3. Yeah, here I was all psyched for a nice sail and then BAM red wake.
    Brutal, Sarah Anne, brutal!

    KymmInBarcelona

    October 30, 2014 at 12:34 am

    • Sorry. As they’re sailing there’s no propeller turning so hopefully they just caught a big fish with the keel.

      Sarah Ann

      October 31, 2014 at 8:17 pm

  4. Yikes!!

    jetgirlcos

    October 30, 2014 at 4:48 am

  5. When I was a sailor we called those maneuvers “angles and dangles”. Red wakes sound like they would be best avoided. You did great with your DSV. I enjoyed this one.

    tnkerr

    October 30, 2014 at 5:09 am

    • Thanks Thom. Red wakes are definitely to be avoided – especially swimming in them.

      Sarah Ann

      October 31, 2014 at 8:17 pm

  6. You had me at red wake! Nice!

    Jen

    October 30, 2014 at 2:11 pm

  7. It started off so serene! I wonder what they hit?

    draliman

    October 30, 2014 at 2:52 pm

    • Glad you got serene – that was the idea. I had a discussion with my other half about what they could have hit. Assuming the boat’s under sail then the propeller isn’t turning so won’t be cutting and hacking anything in the water. So the keel/ something on the hull must have cut a big fish, which is still alive (for the moment at least) and pumping out its blood. Does that work? Or is the credible also boring!

      Sarah Ann

      October 31, 2014 at 8:21 pm

      • That works! Either that or someone was doing a “DiCaprio/Winslet” Titanic moment at the prow and fell in…

        draliman

        October 31, 2014 at 8:39 pm

      • πŸ™‚ Well, if they will play silly buggers…

        Sarah Ann

        October 31, 2014 at 8:58 pm

  8. I’m a sailor. I love sailing. I loved this piece especially because of the creepy and disturbing ending!!!

    Gina

    October 30, 2014 at 4:16 pm

    • Thanks for letting me know this piece works for you as a sailor. I’ve never sailed – it strikes me as difficult (or maybe I’m just too clumsy) – so I’m happy to hear you enjoyed it.

      Sarah Ann

      October 31, 2014 at 8:23 pm

  9. “Urgh” was I think the sound I made at the end! Such a beautiful description of sailing along – I love that first paragraph with the kissing winds and slicing through the blue – before motor met creature. I’m going with shark because, though I don’t have anything against them, I think I’d like to save a dolphin today. Wonderful DSV and wonderful about face!

    Silverleaf

    October 30, 2014 at 4:20 pm

    • Thanks Tienne. I’m glad you liked kissing winds – it took a while to find the right verb to get the serene feel of the opening. I’m happy to go with shark. It’s something big and not very observant anyway. πŸ™‚

      Sarah Ann

      October 31, 2014 at 8:26 pm

  10. See. See! This is why I don’t do cruises! Well written and confirmed my fear!

    April C.

    October 30, 2014 at 8:00 pm

    • Sorry to be confirming fears. πŸ™‚ Cruise ships have got so big that I imagine it’s quite hard to see what’s going on in the sea itself. But let’s just say a fish got in the way of this boat.

      Sarah Ann

      October 31, 2014 at 8:32 pm

  11. I gotcha, Sarah Ann: tacking, starboard, crew, Mediterranean. You never said sailboat. I’m totally peaceful in a place where blues meet. And then a surprising red slashed through.

    inNateJames

    October 31, 2014 at 1:44 am

    • It was the tacking and starboard gave it away I’m sure. It is peaceful where the blues meet, but I had to get that bump in somewhere – and slashed through is an apt observation.

      Sarah Ann

      October 31, 2014 at 8:30 pm

  12. Gulp. Red wake… that’s not good!

    jannatwrites

    October 31, 2014 at 9:27 am

    • πŸ™‚ There was nothing on any horizon so it has to be a fish that got sliced. Doesn’t it?

      Sarah Ann

      October 31, 2014 at 8:27 pm


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