Sarah Ann Hall

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#FridayFictioneers – 17/10/14 – Sheep and Seagulls

with 27 comments

 

Every Wednesday Rochelle Wisoff-Fields publishes a photo prompt to inspire writers to write 100-words of flash fiction or poetry.

At any point during the following week, the Friday Fictioneers post their 100-word tales. Read the other stories by clicking below.

 

 

Copyright – Douglas M. MacIlroy

Copyright – Douglas M. MacIlroy

 

Sheep and Seagulls

(Genre: Contemporary Fiction, 100-words)

Sophie attempted to sell shells on the beach before advancing to pick pockets on the promenade. The first time caught, she escaped with a caution; the tenth, she boarded in a young offenders institution.

After the sixth YOI stay. her mother gave up. Her father, missing for two years prior to Sophie’s entrepreneurship, couldn’t help. So her uncle, unafraid of a young woman’s fists or tongue, intervened. He took her from the sea to a farm in the hills, and an aunt who couldn’t stop baking.

Love and rain fell equally in both places, but sheep hear better than seagulls.

 

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Written by Sarah Ann

October 17, 2014 at 11:18 am

27 Responses

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  1. Hmm, sheep’s hearing is better than seagull?

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    Yoshiko

    October 17, 2014 at 12:22 pm

    • For a human at least – sheep have visible ears and are likely to stand still when someone speaks to them. Seagulls tend to flit about too much to pay attention. 🙂

      Sarah Ann

      October 17, 2014 at 6:11 pm

  2. I like the description of her activities as “entrepreneurship”! I’m glad her new home is working out for her.

    draliman

    October 17, 2014 at 12:47 pm

    • I think entrepreneurship fitted. She wasn’t setting out on a life of crime, was just looking for a way out.

      Sarah Ann

      October 17, 2014 at 6:13 pm

  3. I like your keen details, Sarah. Like entrepreneurship and a woman’s fists or tongue. The farm life plus baking (yum) sounds like a better fit for her, and an opportunity to take life a little slower.

    Amy Reese

    October 17, 2014 at 6:57 pm

    • I think a slower life and fewer distractions are what she needs to help her back on the straight and narrow.

      Sarah Ann

      October 20, 2014 at 8:36 pm

  4. He took her from the sea to a farm in the hills, and an aunt who couldn’t stop baking.

    Wow! this is delightfully poetic!

    aliciajamtaas

    October 18, 2014 at 4:20 am

    • That’s good to hear. That line was a pig to get right as it kept changing (hill farm/ she farm in the hills) as I tried to fit into the word count. II kept coming back to this one because of its flow and how it sounded, so I’, glad it made an impression.

      Sarah Ann

      October 20, 2014 at 8:37 pm

  5. I really liked this Sarah. The transition was heartwarming.

    Sandra

    October 18, 2014 at 3:10 pm

    • Thank you Sandra. To hear those words from you is praise indeed. 🙂

      Sarah Ann

      October 20, 2014 at 8:38 pm

  6. Dear Sarah, Beautiful story with perfect words. She was so lucky to have an aunt who would take the time and effort to try and help. I hope SHE doesn’t disappoint them. Excellent! Nan 🙂

    Nan Falkner

    October 18, 2014 at 4:55 pm

    • I don’t think she will disappoint. She needs time and space to get her head in order. But she is lucky to have people there to provide those things.

      Sarah Ann

      October 20, 2014 at 8:39 pm

  7. The harshness of the hills and the aunt who bakes.. I think Sophie will learn there up in the hills…

    Björn Rudberg (brudberg)

    October 18, 2014 at 6:50 pm

    • I think she will too, and the fluffy sheep will make the hills a little less harsh 🙂

      Sarah Ann

      October 20, 2014 at 8:39 pm

  8. Dear Sarah Ann,

    I loved the fearless uncle and aunt who can’t stop baking. Sounds like a warm place for Sophie to find loving discipline. Really nicely done. I enjoyed it immensely.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

    rochellewisoff

    October 18, 2014 at 7:29 pm

    • Thank you Rochelle, that is so lovely and encouraging to hear.

      Sarah Ann

      October 20, 2014 at 8:40 pm

  9. A lovely story. I like your descriptive details and the final line about ‘love and rain’ is intriguing. She needed to be in the right place to receive the love, I suspect.

    Margaret

    October 20, 2014 at 1:49 am

    • Thank you for your comment. The line about love and rain was to indicate that her mother loved her just as much as her aunt and uncle, just she wasn’t in a position to cope with her (temporarily) wayward daughter. Very happy you enjoyed my story.

      Sarah Ann

      October 20, 2014 at 8:42 pm

  10. That’s a good aunt and uncle to step in when everyone else had stepped away.

    jannatwrites

    October 21, 2014 at 8:14 am

    • Sometimes aunts and uncles are the only ones willing or able to step in.

      Sarah Ann

      October 25, 2014 at 4:09 pm

  11. Lovely lyrical language. I really enjoyed this tale for our times.

    patrickprinsloo

    October 21, 2014 at 12:40 pm

    • Thank you – I like lyrical, just wish I could achieve it more often.

      Sarah Ann

      October 25, 2014 at 9:44 am

  12. All that ends well I guess with peace and happiness found. Good read

    Weltchysnotebook

    October 21, 2014 at 6:22 pm

  13. I really like the tone you managed to capture here, from wry humour to sadness to tenderness, conveying her entire journey so well.

    Blake

    October 22, 2014 at 9:23 pm

    • Thanks for your comment and letting me know I’d managed to do all that 🙂

      Sarah Ann

      October 25, 2014 at 4:11 pm


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