Sarah Ann Hall

Reporting on writing in progress or, more probably, not; practising flash fiction.

Rural Idyll – #gargleblaster166

with 15 comments


Leaves kiss, branches squeak, twisting in the whispering breeze. Birds sing, cackle, call. Creatures rustle the undergrowth. All remind her that you chose to move from the traffic roar and sirens of the city.

Your voice is gone and natureโ€™s cacophony deafens.






Written by Sarah Ann

June 16, 2014 at 8:15 pm

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  1. Great take! I love the line: Your voice is gone and natureโ€™s cacophony deafens.


    June 16, 2014 at 9:30 pm

    • Thanks. I wasn’t sure whether to use ‘your voice’/ ‘his voice’ so happy to know it works.

      Sarah Ann

      June 18, 2014 at 7:35 pm

      • Yep, in my opinion, it makes the piece intimate. ๐Ÿ™‚


        June 18, 2014 at 9:01 pm

  2. Me too, I agree with theinnerzone…the last line is great. It fills in a whole story all by itself! Awesome!


    June 16, 2014 at 11:22 pm

    • Thanks for your comment ๐Ÿ™‚ I love to know when a plan comes together.

      Sarah Ann

      June 18, 2014 at 7:37 pm

  3. Beautiful! And rendered so poignant by that last line.


    June 17, 2014 at 1:27 am

  4. I love the twist–that nature has become anything but quiet and peaceful. Super sounds in this.

    Jennifer G. Knoblock

    June 17, 2014 at 8:35 am

    • Yes, I think she finds nature scary and unsettling without someone to explain it to her. Thanks for reading ๐Ÿ™‚

      Sarah Ann

      June 18, 2014 at 7:41 pm

  5. Oooh Powerful ending! Another argument for my daughter to make her own decisions!


    June 17, 2014 at 11:21 am

    • Thanks Kymm. Are you collecting arguments to show your daughter at requisite moments? ๐Ÿ™‚

      Sarah Ann

      June 18, 2014 at 7:43 pm

  6. I’ll trade nature’s cacophony for city traffic and sirens anytime.

    Eric Alagan

    June 18, 2014 at 2:40 pm

    • Me too probably. But then there are those strange noises in the night – foxes or owls or something that have you jumping out of your skin. ๐Ÿ™‚

      Sarah Ann

      June 18, 2014 at 7:39 pm

  7. Nature’s cacophony – love that!! Right now, I’ve got crickets, birds and barking dogs in the background. Much more peaceful than city noises ๐Ÿ™‚


    June 19, 2014 at 6:19 am

    • ๐Ÿ™‚ we have lots of birds – the parakeets are raucous. Unfortunately, we get the roar of the road and planes coming and going to Heathrow. Looking forward to moving to a quieter spot!

      Sarah Ann

      June 19, 2014 at 8:54 pm

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