Sarah Ann Hall

Reporting on writing in progress or, more probably, not; practising flash fiction.

Damned Lies – #gargleblaster165

with 32 comments


For years the inconsistencies slipped by. It took time to get to know him, and what a life he’d lived!

Doubt settled slowly.

When a river of lies flowed from his lips, their friendship ended. Hope crushed under the deluge of uncertainty.






Written by Sarah Ann

June 9, 2014 at 10:24 am

32 Responses

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  1. Yep! I can relate. Nicely done!


    June 9, 2014 at 11:04 am

    • Thank you. It’s a pity that you can relate. I think everyone must meet someone like this in their lifetime.

      Sarah Ann

      June 9, 2014 at 9:09 pm

  2. Loved this, Sarah – you used ‘water’ as a theme throughout

    slipped by
    settled slowly
    river of lies flowed

    The dam broke under the weight of his damned lies – now, that must have been a flash flood of realization!

    Have a great week ahead,

    Eric Alagan

    June 9, 2014 at 12:44 pm

    • I used water metaphors, but you came up with the best line with the dam breaking. Thank you for read and fantastic comment. You have a great week too.

      Sarah Ann

      June 9, 2014 at 9:10 pm

  3. I adore this line: “Doubt settled slowly.” Nice job with the water imagery. 🙂

    Jennifer G. Knoblock

    June 9, 2014 at 2:42 pm

    • Thank you. I didn’t start out with any water in this piece – it arrived all by itself in the third draft. Happy to know it worked for you, though.

      Sarah Ann

      June 9, 2014 at 9:13 pm

  4. Once the lies sets in it’s a slippery slope down

    • Sometimes it’s hard to see the lies, but once they’re clear, it can only go one way.

      Sarah Ann

      June 9, 2014 at 9:16 pm

  5. I like the idea of inconsistencies slipping by – subtle, yet powerful.


    June 9, 2014 at 4:36 pm

    • Thank you – subtle and powerful is good. I think we do allow inconsistencies to slip, putting them down to memory lapses, until everything becomes a bit more obvious.

      Sarah Ann

      June 9, 2014 at 9:21 pm

  6. How sad that it took so long for his lies to be clear. How sad that people lie at all! Nicely done!


    June 9, 2014 at 5:21 pm

    • How sad indeed. This is based in truth. I chose to lose a dear friend of long-standing when the lies became so frequent I felt unable to believe a word he said.

      Sarah Ann

      June 9, 2014 at 9:24 pm

  7. Ouch! You can only fool so many people for so long, huh? I like this take on the prompt.


    June 9, 2014 at 6:07 pm

    • Thank you – yep only for so long, but some of us (i.e., me) are very slow on the uptake. 🙂

      Sarah Ann

      June 9, 2014 at 9:25 pm

  8. I like to think I can tell right away, but it’s not always possible. That sucks when you discover a friend really isn’t.

    • Thanks for reading and the comment. I have to admit to being overly trusting. I expect everyone to be as nice as I am 😉

      Sarah Ann

      June 9, 2014 at 9:30 pm

  9. It never pays to lie…they always catch up with you!

    • I’m of that opinion too. At least I’ll always be the one to be caught out 🙂

      Sarah Ann

      June 10, 2014 at 7:50 pm

  10. “River of lies,” that’s a powerful phrase.

    M. L. Sexton

    June 10, 2014 at 1:54 am

  11. So sad 😦 it’s terrible to feel so let down and betrayed. I like how “Doubt settled slowly” sits alone on it’s own line.


    June 10, 2014 at 5:37 am

    • Thanks. The doubt line sits alone to give the impression of time passing, or at least that was the plan. It is sad, but losing a friend creates space to make a new and better one.

      Sarah Ann

      June 10, 2014 at 7:58 pm

  12. Hmm Good liars can be quite entertaining… until you can’t escape from the lies anymore. Great piece, Sarah Ann!


    June 10, 2014 at 12:21 pm

  13. I see you’ve met my ex 🙂


    June 10, 2014 at 7:52 pm

  14. I know some people like this. It’s so tempting to believe.

    Tweed and Tango

    June 10, 2014 at 8:53 pm

    • Some people are really convincing. I suppose if they believe it themselves….

      Sarah Ann

      June 15, 2014 at 8:19 pm

  15. Oh, the mistrust that snowballs after you’ve caught someone in a lie. You’ve captured that feeling well. Cheers!


    June 10, 2014 at 10:34 pm

    • Thank you. I hadn’t thought of it snowballing, but that’s just what it does.

      Sarah Ann

      June 15, 2014 at 8:18 pm

  16. You used that line “Doubt settled slowly” really effectively – I love that. And your last line is really powerful. Great job. Thanks for linking up!


    June 11, 2014 at 12:12 am

    • Thank you. I enjoy the challenge of trying to condense something into 42-words. The ‘doubt’ line moved around a fair bit so it’s good to know it stopped in the right place.

      Sarah Ann

      June 15, 2014 at 8:20 pm

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