Sarah Ann Hall

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For Love – #gargleblaster158

with 11 comments

 

‘For love.’

‘Love doesn’t need you to fight for her.’

‘The woman I desire says I must prove I am worthy.’

‘By beating your rivals to a pulp?’

‘Well not exactly, but -‘

‘I’d find a more deserving lover if I were you.’

 



 

This is my very rushed and unpolished submission for yeahwrite‘s gargleblaster#158.

The challenge is to write a 42-word story to the week’s Ultimate Question.

This week:

“Tell me something, old friend: why are you fighting?”

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Written by Sarah Ann

April 21, 2014 at 9:16 pm

11 Responses

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  1. They have a point 🙂 If she needs that much proof he is worthy, then perhaps there is one better suited for him.

    jannatwrites

    April 21, 2014 at 9:44 pm

  2. Choosing someone who makes you prove your worth. . .seems like a recipe for heartache.

    fatgirlinboxinggloves

    April 22, 2014 at 3:44 am

  3. It doesn’t seem rushed or unpolished.

  4. manliness is more about restrain than brutality.

    habibadanyal

    April 22, 2014 at 6:43 am

  5. Ah,sound advice :-)Hope he listens! Good to see you here Sarah:-)

    atrm61

    April 22, 2014 at 6:49 am

  6. I liked the (intentional?) tension between the really dramatic phrasing of the Combatant, drawn in by a thousand romantic stories and stupid movies, and the more colloquial voice of the Other. (I, uh, may have dated the Combatant. He really does talk like that when he’s starring in his own stories, and he really does set himself up for disappointment)

    saroful

    April 22, 2014 at 4:49 pm

  7. Ha – what saroful said. I love how the romantic bumps up against the practical here. You did a great job of creating two very distinct characters with only dialog, no descriptors or anything. Very nicely done! Thanks for linking it up.

    Christine

    April 22, 2014 at 6:24 pm

    • I second that – I can picture their expressions, if not their faces, and that conveys so much more.

      Kay

      April 22, 2014 at 11:47 pm

  8. But, sometimes we can’t choose who cupid has connected us to, can we? And once love is there, it is hard not to try and live up to their expectations and desires…

    djmatticus

    April 22, 2014 at 6:40 pm

  9. Boy she is very demanding, isn’t she? 😉

    jenbrunett

    April 22, 2014 at 9:17 pm

  10. ‘I’d find a more deserving lover if I were you.’

    Great advice 🙂

    Eric Alagan

    April 24, 2014 at 3:57 am


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