Sarah Ann Hall

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#FridayFictioneers – 28/2/14 – The Home That Yves Built

with 41 comments

Every Wednesday Rochelle Wisoff-Fields publishes a photo prompt to inspire writers to write 100-words of flash fiction or poetry.

Every Friday (or before) the Friday Fictioneers post their 100-word tales. Visit Rochelle’s site for the rules on how to join in and check out the other stories by clicking on the blue guy.

 

Thanks to Sandra for this week’s photo.

 

The Home That Yves Built

(Genre: Adult Fantasy, 100-words)

When he woke on his 35th birthday, Yves decided to fulfil his daughter’s dream and build her a chateau like the one that overlooked them. For months, tractor pulled laden trailer over broken fields to a smooth rise the far side of their farm.

When it was done, Yves stood back and admired his creation. Flora, now well into her teens, sneered. ‘Remember what happened to the little pig’s house.’

Disheartened, Yves entered and barred the door of his castle. No amount of levering could get it open. Flora, humbled by the impenetrability of cob-daubed straw, moved in soon after.

 

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Written by Sarah Ann

February 28, 2014 at 11:37 pm

41 Responses

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  1. That will teach her to sneer at dear old dad. Good story,

    JackieP

    February 28, 2014 at 11:49 pm

    • Indeed. As I recall, teenagers can do a lot of unnecessary sneering. Thankfully, or hopefully, we all grow out of it. 🙂

      Sarah Ann

      March 3, 2014 at 11:50 am

  2. Great story, Sarah!

    Amy Reese

    March 1, 2014 at 1:23 am

  3. Oh why don’t teenagers learn to just shut it at times 😉 Yay Dad 🙂

    ramblingsfromamum

    March 1, 2014 at 5:13 am

    • Hmm, have I touched a nerve? It’s weird, but this didn’t start out as a story about teenagers. Yves just took too long to build his dream home.

      Sarah Ann

      March 3, 2014 at 11:52 am

  4. Ha!Teenagers think they know everything-Flora learnt a good lesson and now Dad must be really pleased 🙂 Lovely story Sarah:-)

    atrm61

    March 1, 2014 at 10:18 am

  5. She should think herself lucky he let her in. 🙂 Nicely done.

    Sandra

    March 1, 2014 at 10:30 am

    • Thanks, Sandra. I think you’re right. And she was such a sweet little nine-year-old when he started.

      Sarah Ann

      March 3, 2014 at 12:05 pm

  6. Good for Flora, she learnt her lesson. Good old Yves, he’s a great dad!

    tinkerbelle96

    March 1, 2014 at 11:39 am

    • Thanks. I’m glad you were able to feel that about the characters.

      Sarah Ann

      March 3, 2014 at 12:06 pm

  7. That will teach the little smartypants! 🙂

    freyathewriter

    March 1, 2014 at 6:17 pm

    • She was just having an off day. I think having to wait so long had got to her. 🙂

      Sarah Ann

      March 3, 2014 at 12:10 pm

  8. She’s learnt. What a great building material. Lasts forever as well.

    patrickprinsloo

    March 1, 2014 at 7:01 pm

    • She has, and they’re both happy now.
      I was amazed to see on some TV programme ages ago how long simple mud bricks last, and then they can be broken down in water and remoulded.

      Sarah Ann

      March 3, 2014 at 12:26 pm

  9. This caused me to consider that the true problem for the first little pig was impatience and sloth. A brick house often includes straw in its construction. Only straw with no mud will fail completely. Nice story.

    Cheers!
    MG

    storydivamg

    March 1, 2014 at 7:56 pm

    • Yep, it’s all in your straw/ mud mix. I think you’re right that the first little pig was a bit nonchalant about the whole house building thing. Many thanks for reading.

      Sarah Ann

      March 3, 2014 at 12:14 pm

  10. Ha. yes you can do a lot with straw.

    • So much more than we can imagine. It’s a long-standing dream of ours to attempt to build a straw house. We have the instruction book, now all we need is the money to buy the land…. 😉

      Sarah Ann

      March 3, 2014 at 12:22 pm

  11. The teen years can be tough. Glad they got back together eventually.

    janet

    sustainabilitea

    March 3, 2014 at 12:00 am

    • I think she was a little jaded at the time it had taken Dad to build her dream. Little girls don’t imagine castles can be built of straw.

      Sarah Ann

      March 3, 2014 at 12:20 pm

  12. Dear Sarah,

    Not that it has anything to do with the story, but my son’s father in law’s name is Yves. As far as I know he’s never built a cob house. Glad that Flora came to her senses. Nice one.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

    rochellewisoff

    March 3, 2014 at 12:28 am

    • Yves is a good name. I don’t know anyone who has built a cob house either, but I live I hope of meeting one and being invited in to see what they’ve achieved 🙂

      Sarah Ann

      March 3, 2014 at 12:19 pm

  13. Hopefully she’s learned her lesson. Nice of dad to let her in after she was so nasty, with all his hard work and all!

    draliman

    March 3, 2014 at 1:35 pm

    • I think Yves a bit of a pushover when Flora flashes her eyelashes and apologises. Hopefully she has learnt not to be so judgemental.

      Sarah Ann

      March 4, 2014 at 7:37 pm

  14. a typical teenager. 🙂 i too used to be all angst all the time. lol but i’m glad she learned her lesson and to appreciate her dad 🙂

    K.Z.

    March 3, 2014 at 4:11 pm

    • Thanks kz. Angst is definitely the word. She didn’t trust anything her dad had built to stand the test of time. But they are living there together and happily now. 🙂

      Sarah Ann

      March 4, 2014 at 7:36 pm

  15. Wow, I liked the link best of all. Great idea for a future post, TYTYTYTY, Tay. 😀

    Taygibay

    March 3, 2014 at 10:57 pm

    • Thank you. Some of those homes at the end of the link are gorgeous. If only we could all have one.

      Sarah Ann

      March 4, 2014 at 7:27 pm

  16. Haha yes teenagers do sneer, maybe too much for their own good lol nice story.

    camgal

    March 4, 2014 at 1:20 am

    • Thank you. I suspect I sneered too much. Oh no, I remember being the perfect teenager. Actually, it’s too long ago now. Teenagers have far too bad a reputation!

      Sarah Ann

      March 4, 2014 at 7:34 pm

      • Haha 🙂

        camgal

        March 4, 2014 at 10:39 pm

  17. What an ungrateful child (like many teens!) I’m glad the dad was big about it and let her in… not sure that I would have 🙂

    jannatwrites

    March 4, 2014 at 5:00 pm

    • Oh dear. Flora doesn’t come out of this very well. She was really sweet when she was younger, which is why Yves wanted to build her dream. I think she was just having a dad hormone day/ week/ year. They’re both much happier now. 🙂

      Sarah Ann

      March 4, 2014 at 7:32 pm

  18. Good story and well written. Glad it had a happy ending.

    patriciaruthsusan

    March 4, 2014 at 6:58 pm

    • Thank you. I had always planned for it to have a happy ending. Flora’s sneering was the surprise element for me. 😉

      Sarah Ann

      March 4, 2014 at 7:30 pm

  19. You showed real insight into the workings of people and relationship between them in only 100 words. Very nicely done.

    • Thanks for the comment. These characters wrote their own story really.

      Sarah Ann

      March 7, 2014 at 11:02 pm

  20. how wonderful to have a house custom built and a cob one at that! lovely.

    Sun

    March 5, 2014 at 11:58 pm


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