Sarah Ann Hall

Reporting on writing in progress or, more probably, not.

#FridayFictioneers – 21/2/14 – Grandpa’s Bell

with 30 comments

 

I’m late and my title is just a tad un-original. I am useless when it comes to titles, so suggestions to suit my story below are very much appreciated.

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Each Wednesday Rochelle Wisoff-Fields publishes a photo prompt to inspire writers to write 100-words of flash fiction or poetry.

Every Friday (or before) the Friday Fictioneers post their 100-word tales. Visit Rochelle’s site for the rules on how to join in and check out the other stories by clicking on the blue guy.

 

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Grandpa’s Bell

(Genre: General Fiction, 100-words)

Grandpa loved the sea: its dips and troughs, the white-flecked blue-green, the hiss of regular waves. But he paced on flat calm days, living for the nights he went out as a lifeboat man.

His was a world of swell, pitching and tossing; communicating by sign language as wind devoured voices and obliterated hearing. While the station bell tolled, summoning ships and men back to shore, Grandpa saved lives.

When the station closed, they presented the bell to Grandma. It hangs in a window wherever she lives, its sound carrying across land and water, forever calling him home.

 

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Written by Sarah Ann

February 22, 2014 at 3:46 pm

30 Responses

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  1. Lovely take on this prompt.

    yarnspinnerr

    February 22, 2014 at 5:17 pm

  2. a beautiful story. i really liked what you did with the ending, with grandpa being proclaimed a hero and the bell “forever calling him home”

    K.Z.

    February 22, 2014 at 7:25 pm

    • I’m glad that line worked. I wasn’t sure I wasn’t over-doing it.

      Sarah Ann

      February 25, 2014 at 9:15 pm

  3. Living close to the sea.. there’s always the loss.. I love how the bell forever calls him home..

    Björn Rudberg (brudberg)

    February 22, 2014 at 9:25 pm

    • The sea is a thing of beauty and terror. I’m pleased you like the idea of the bell calling him.

      Sarah Ann

      February 25, 2014 at 9:18 pm

  4. Lovely take and beautifully written.

    carolinehills

    February 22, 2014 at 10:42 pm

  5. Lovely descriptions and what a great idea!

    janet

    sustainabilitea

    February 23, 2014 at 3:02 am

    • Looking at the photo again I have no idea why I went with the sea in my piece. Maybe that’s my inherited memory, bells on boats instead of bells in church towers?! Thank you for reading.

      Sarah Ann

      February 25, 2014 at 9:20 pm

  6. This is beautiful Sarah..perhaps “For whom the Bell tolls”? x

    ramblingsfromamum

    February 23, 2014 at 5:30 am

    • Thank you Jenny. Yes, maybe I should have borrowed from Messrs Donne and Hemingway 😉

      Sarah Ann

      February 25, 2014 at 9:23 pm

  7. Lovely story with great dialogue. I could picture the sea rocking the boat. Well-written ending.

    patriciaruthsusan

    February 23, 2014 at 8:43 am

  8. I think the title works beautifully. Sometimes simplicity in a title adds to the piece. Nice take on the prompt.

    Cheers!
    Marie Gail

    storydivamg

    February 23, 2014 at 10:10 pm

    • Thank you. And simple is a much better description of the title than my labelling it boring or predictable. 🙂

      Sarah Ann

      February 25, 2014 at 9:35 pm

  9. Precious story, wonderful dialogue 🙂

    camgal

    February 24, 2014 at 12:44 am

  10. Eerie and loved the way the words flowed! Excellent! Nan

    Nan Falkner

    February 24, 2014 at 9:05 am

  11. Great story and well told! Nan

    Nan Falkner

    February 24, 2014 at 9:07 am

  12. Touching and gentle despite the rough seas. Beaut.

    patrickprinsloo

    February 24, 2014 at 9:20 am

    • Thanks for that! Your comment makes me see the story in a different way, at least I hadn’t noticed that contrast before. And that’s what makes comments really useful. Ta 🙂

      Sarah Ann

      February 25, 2014 at 9:32 pm

  13. Dear Sarah,

    Beautifully told. Vivid descriptions sent this story to the top.

    Shalom

    Rochelle

    rochellewisoff

    February 24, 2014 at 11:24 am

    • Dear Rochelle, Thank you for that wonderful and encouraging comment! I’m happy to know the descriptions worked. It’s hard to fit everything in in those 100 words.

      Sarah Ann

      February 25, 2014 at 9:29 pm

  14. A beautifully crafted story.

    subrotop

    February 24, 2014 at 1:37 pm

  15. What a gem of a story Sarah!Loved the phrase,” communicating by sign language as wind devoured voices and obliterated hearing.” and “forever calling him home.” Great job 🙂

    atrm61

    February 24, 2014 at 4:20 pm

    • 🙂 🙂 🙂 (Sorry not to be more wordy.)

      Sarah Ann

      February 25, 2014 at 9:26 pm

      • Hee!Hee!Words are not always necessary too-specially between like minded friends 😉

        atrm61

        February 25, 2014 at 9:27 pm


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