Sarah Ann Hall

Reporting on writing in progress or, more probably, not; practising flash fiction.

#VisDare 29 – Pensive – Eighty Percent

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This is such a gorgeous photo for Angela’s VisDare this week. I haven’t done it justice in rushing to get this posted before I go away, but I didn’t want to miss out.


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Eighty Percent (149 words)

Mavis sits in the corner and tries to look vacant. It doesn’t pay to be too bright around here. With her memory lapses and snappiness, she fits right in. The carers don’t know it’s only tiredness and not dementia causing her problems.

The night staff make it difficult to wander around. It’s their fault she has to shimmy down the drainpipe to spend her nights with George. And once she and he are done, she climbs back up and Skypes her granddaughter, just home from school on the other side of the world.

No one would believe her if she told them. Old people don’t have sex, let alone perform gymnastic feats. She looks around the lounge at the dribblers and the lost, and frowns. An 80-year can have eighty percent of the wrist strength they had at 20, if only they don’t give in to their failing bodies.




Written by Sarah Ann

July 18, 2013 at 11:08 pm

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  1. Age only a number – you go girl! (Pretty apt for me today) Safe trip Sarah!


    July 19, 2013 at 12:24 am

  2. This was lovely. It reminds me of my nana. ^_^


    July 20, 2013 at 1:36 am

  3. Well good for her! I have a thing for stories about older people doing things that aren’t expected of them. This is a great short piece that does exactly that. Good stuff!


    July 22, 2013 at 9:04 pm

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