Sarah Ann Hall

Reporting on writing in progress or, more probably, not; practising flash fiction.

Two for Tuesday 16 & 17 – Double D

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I missed posting for Andy’s Two Tuesday Challenge last week as I hadn’t finished my story. I have now, and incorporated this week’s prompts as well.


Prompts 9th-15th July:

Standard Prompt:
permanent marker

Non-Standard Prompt:
For this week’s alternative prompt write a story without using the letter “J.”

Prompts 16th – 22nd July

Standard Prompt:
see through

Non-Standard Prompt:
For this week’s alternative prompt write a story that begins with the words: “Anyone home?”

The rules:

The Standard Prompt will always consist of a two-word prompt to be used as inspiration. The Non-Standard Prompt will change from week to week. Sometimes it will be a visual prompt, sometimes a first sentence or phrase, sometimes a scenario, etc.  The limit for the Two for Tuesday Standard Prompts is 200 words and the Non Standard Prompt has a minimum of 200 words but no limit allowing for more in depth explorations.



Double D (510 words)

‘Anyone home?’

Hamish scowled at the retreating feet and sniggers reverberating along the corridor as his friends and tormentors headed towards fun.

He looked around the classroom, dropped his bag on the floor, and collapsed into a chair. He leant forward, spread his arms across the nearest desk and laid his head on them, rocking it slowly from side to side. This wasn’t fair. It really wasn’t fair. Yes, he had blocked the sinks with paper and left the taps running. Yes, he was responsible for the toilets being out of order while the cleaners were called in with mops and buckets. But, it wasn’t his fault that Ian Pattison has pissed in the water fountain. That had been Ian’s own inimitable idea, and he would suffer for it later. At least Hamish hoped he would.

Hamish admitted he had done wrong and it was right he should be punished. By all means the staff was entitled to put Hamish in detention at lunchtime for three days. He’d accept the whole week if the head wanted, and even stay behind after school if that would make everyone feel better, but not today. From tomorrow he’d stay in every day for a fortnight, but please not today.

He raised his head and leant back to enable him to see through the high windows. The day was perfect. The sun was shining, fluffy white clouds shuffled slowly across the blue. It was warm and everyone was stripping off. Today was the first day, the only day, the school was having its swimming lesson at the local lido. Katy Smith would be there, legs up to heaven, bum curvy like a perfect apple you want to paint rather than bite into. And her breasts. Well, that was the point, he had no idea what stage they were at and now he wouldn’t get to see. It was so unfair.

Hamish stood and walked around the room. He was supposed to sit and do work, but with no teacher there yet to monitor him, he couldn’t settle. He walked up one side of the room and down the other. He sauntered up the central aisle, around Mr. Braithewaite’s desk. The top drawer was open slightly. He peered inside at the array of pens and paper clips. It was then that another idea struck him. He might as well be hung for a sheep as a lamb. Glancing towards the door, listening for footsteps approaching down the corridor, Hamish’s fingers flicked into the drawer and withdrew a permanent marker.

Hamish was at his seat, working through exercises from his Maths textbook when Mr. Braithwaite arrived to supervise him.

‘Keep up this good behaviour and I’m sure the head will reduce your sentence,’ Mr. Braithwaite said when he let Hamish leave an hour later.

The following morning the school was agog at the latest graffiti scrawled across the head’s office window, wondering who and how. Hamish kept his head down and his mouth shut. How was he to know he’d guessed Katy’s bra size so perfectly?




Written by Sarah Ann

July 18, 2013 at 1:38 pm

5 Responses

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  1. That’s a first, four prompts in one story. And a great story to boot! keep ’em coming. You never fail to entertain!


    July 18, 2013 at 3:50 pm

    • Thank you Andy for that glowing comment. The j one was easier than I thought, apart from thinking of characters called James, Jennifer and Jackson straight away. I’m away for the next couple of weeks so I’ll see how many of the prompts I miss I can sew together once I’m back. 😉

      Sarah Ann

      July 18, 2013 at 10:40 pm

      • You’ll be missed. I hope you are doing something fun! I look forward to seeing what you are able to do with all those missed prompts!


        July 19, 2013 at 1:42 am

  2. You so wonderfully capture the drama of youth in this one. These horrendous defeats that seem so small now loomed so larger when we were younger. And the perverse relations between kids and authority figures… All in 510 words. Well done!


    July 18, 2013 at 7:32 pm

    • Thanks Eric. I didn’t realise I’d done all that so thanks for letting me know. It’s difficult trying to get back inside the head of a kid. I read this to my husband, who has more experience of being a frustrated young man, and he liked it. If I can get a story past him without his editing comments, I feel I’m doing quite well. He helped out with the title.

      Sarah Ann

      July 18, 2013 at 10:44 pm

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