Sarah Ann Hall

Reporting on writing in progress or, more probably, not; practising flash fiction.

Ligo Haibun Challenge – Haze

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The two choices for this week’s Ligo Haibun Challenge are:

Monsoon or Haze

The rules:

  • The haiku/collection of haiku related to the text to close. The haiku should be as authentic as possible, with no syllable count, no capitals or full stop, all ideally making 220 word max.
  • Wear the Ligo badge to the right with pride on your blog! And pin the Circle of Appreciation to your blog if you haibun is selected as an honourable mention.


Spring and autumn bring fantasy to the river. As morning dawns, cold air falls to meet warm waters: mist forms and rises. Giselle walks the towpath in a trance. Coots float like bruises on the river’s surface; trees loom like telegraph poles; birds sing into their pillows.

At the periphery of her vision, phantoms twist and turn. Elves roll their eyes, fairies dance. Giselle’s rational brain says the haze is a result of hot and cold air mixing. Her imagination believes creatures live in the temporary murk, whose ancestors met and mated in true fog.

The lives of the ghouls and spirits that tickle the air swirl and flicker shorter than a mayfly. The day heats, a breeze flutters, and Giselle’s dream world dissolves.

fire and ice conjoined

form ethereal smokescreen

lucid sight blinded



Written by Sarah Ann

July 4, 2013 at 10:19 pm

18 Responses

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  1. Loved the fairies and the mist , great imagery.

    • Thank you. I was trying to go for imagery and description this week. 🙂

      Sarah Ann

      July 6, 2013 at 4:49 pm

  2. Very magical, Sarah. Thank you for putting the concise instructions at the top too.


    July 4, 2013 at 10:52 pm

  3. As always, lovely descriptions and interesting imagination. enjoyed the haiku especially


    July 5, 2013 at 1:12 am

    • I’m glad the descriptions came across. I extrapolated from my early morning river walks, when mist hangs over the river. I’m happy you liked the haiku – I’m still learning.

      Sarah Ann

      July 6, 2013 at 6:41 pm

  4. The haibun wonderfully depicts the spirit of the haze.


    July 5, 2013 at 6:21 am

    • Thank you. I’m sure there is more to mist and haze, but I tried to record some of its mystery.

      Sarah Ann

      July 6, 2013 at 6:42 pm

  5. Thank you Sarah, your haibun and haiku are excellent. A pleasurable read and very well written! I agree with yarnspinnerr, also! 🙂

    Penny L Howe

    July 5, 2013 at 6:36 pm

    • Thank you, Penny. For some reason the haikus come first and I work the prose around them. (That might be cheating?) This was another falling asleep-inspired haiku, but I reached for the light-switch. I wasn’t going to lose another one to sleep.

      Sarah Ann

      July 6, 2013 at 6:44 pm

      • Nope, not cheating, I so get that. Your own creative muse at work. Just excellent, I call that going with the flow! 🙂

        Penny L Howe

        July 6, 2013 at 7:35 pm

  6. Enjoyed being pulled into this magical world.

    Peripatetic Eric

    July 5, 2013 at 8:25 pm

    • Oh good. I enjoyed your monsoon piece – such descriptive writing.

      Sarah Ann

      July 6, 2013 at 6:46 pm

  7. Beautiful, misty and magical. A haibun that flowed so well, and so original too. This week I am looking for how the writer relates personally to the scene set – this would not have been possible in this fantasy haibun, but does not take anything away from it. Lovely. Stay with us – I particularly enjoy your work!


    July 6, 2013 at 11:55 am

    • You mean I don’t strike you as a Giselle? Fair enough. Very happy you liked it otherwise. And that last sentiment is mutual. 🙂
      As for this week’s photo prompts, well, I won’t be rushing to post… thinking cap pulled down firmly over my eyes on how to relate personally to either of those.

      Sarah Ann

      July 6, 2013 at 6:50 pm

  8. lovely.. i love the fantasy feel to it.. the image of elves rolling their eyes.. the imagery is wonderful.:)


    July 8, 2013 at 5:23 pm

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