Sarah Ann Hall

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#FiveSentenceFiction – View

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Five Sentence Fiction is about packing a powerful punch in a tiny fist. Each week Lillie McFerrin posts a one word inspiration, then anyone wishing to participate writes a five sentence story based on the prompt word. The word does not have to appear in your five sentences, just use it for direction.

This week: VIEW

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The sky is perfect, a clear and deep powder blue, smudged at the horizon by dove grey smog. The collection of fumes and chemicals should be off-putting, but it offers a perfect contrast to the layer of oaks bordering the grounds, and I can see by the trees tickling the sky that there is a slight breeze. Even so, it must be warm out there and I long to throw open the windows and let in the sounds of birds and traffic, the smell of cut grass tinged with diesel.

Instead the nurses lift and turn me, back to face the wall that my world has become. I cling to the hope that I will, some day, leave here, while the medics continue their quest to avoid my getting bedsores.

 

 

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Written by Sarah Ann

July 2, 2013 at 8:41 pm

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  1. I really like this piece, Very well done. You went to a similar place as I.

    McGuffy Ann

    July 3, 2013 at 1:54 am

    • Thank you. I really liked your take and the need for a view even though your protagonist can’t see it – very thought provoking.

      Sarah Ann

      July 3, 2013 at 8:59 pm

  2. That was perfectly captured. And ending with a view of the wall was a great little twist. Another great read!

    ahblack57

    July 4, 2013 at 11:36 am


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