Sarah Ann Hall

Reporting on writing in progress or, more probably, not; practising flash fiction.

#Trifecta: Week 80 – Lucy’s Date

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This week’s one-word prompt from Trifecta was suggested by Marie Nicole.


The prompt:

FREAK (noun)

1 a : a sudden and odd or seemingly pointless idea or turn of the mind

: a seemingly capricious action or event

2 archaic : a whimsical quality or disposition

3: one that is markedly unusual or abnormal: as

: a person or animal having a physical oddity and appearing in a circus sideshow

slang (1) : a sexual deviate (2) : a person who uses an illicit drug

: hippie

: an atypical postage stamp usually caused by a unique defect in paper (as a crease) or a unique event in the manufacturing process (as a speck of dirt on the plate) that does not produce a constant or systematic effect

The rules:

Your response must be between 33 and 333 words.

You must use the 3rd definition of the given word in your post.

The word itself needs to be included in your response.

You may not use a variation of the word; it needs to be exactly as stated above.

Only one entry per writer.



Lucy’s Date (332 words)

Lucy looked again at her menu of prospective partners. “Nerd who collects freaks” was next up. What was she doing here? Was she really that desperate?

The man who approached didn’t look like a nerd. He was gorgeous: tall dark and handsome in just the right way. When he sat down, emeralds sparkled where his eyes should have been, his smile lifted her heartstrings a semi-tone.

Pull yourself together girl, she chided. Stop being ridiculous. You’re almost swooning.

‘So, you collect freaks?’ she said. It seemed sensible to get the weird stuff out of the way first.

‘Hey, you know about EFOs? That’s wonderful,’ he said. ‘I’ve never met a girl who knew about them before. Did your father collect them? Or your brother? Oh wow. This is fantastic. Did your father collect only freaks or any error? It’s getting so hard, and so expensive. I’d love to see his collection –‘

He should have paused to allow her to answer some of his questions, but he seemed quite caught up in having found a like-minded soul, someone who understood him.

His voice was mellifluous and she allowed him to go on. She tuned out from what he was saying to listen to how he was saying it, smooth and chocolaty, deep and husky. The chiselled jaw, the twinkly eyes, the treacle voice, he was a film star cliché and she was oh so in love.

His flow was only interrupted by the ringing bell.

‘Damn, time to move on,’ he beamed. ‘It’s been really good to talk. Please do get in touch.’

Later, back home, Lucy conferred with her flatmate.

‘You were right,’ she said. ‘Speed dating is for the desperate.’

‘No joy then?’

‘They were all bald, too old, lived with their mothers, or had the dress sense of a Mongolian buffalo.’

‘There wasn’t one who took your fancy?’

‘Oh yeah, Mr. Right was there, but I couldn’t fancy even a beautiful freak who talks about nothing but stamps.’



Written by Sarah Ann

June 6, 2013 at 5:55 pm

16 Responses

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  1. Very enjoyable play on the word freak.


    June 6, 2013 at 6:32 pm

  2. Really enjoyed this, particularly the inclusion of several different freaks. Well written :))

    • Thanks. Glad you enjoyed all the freaks – the stamp one was intriguing to me.

      Sarah Ann

      June 6, 2013 at 9:55 pm

  3. Ha! Nice spin on the prompt.

  4. Ha! I thought about using this definition, but couldn’t figure out what direction to take. I love what you’ve done with it! Well done indeed.


    June 7, 2013 at 1:44 am

  5. I enjoyed this but I am sure that she would have changed his mind to talk of other things… my heart kinda sank when I read the last line.


    June 7, 2013 at 2:19 am

    • Apologies for your sinking heart. Maybe after a moment’s thought she’ll ask for his number.

      Sarah Ann

      June 7, 2013 at 8:44 pm

  6. Everyone has a passion (: Nice job being brave and taking the weird definition!


    June 7, 2013 at 4:13 am

    • It might just be me, but I liked the weird definition. Why would a mis-printed postage stamp be called a freak! I think he needs to develop his passions though. 🙂

      Sarah Ann

      June 7, 2013 at 8:43 pm

  7. Great job! I think she should have given him a chance. 🙂


    June 7, 2013 at 5:33 am

  8. I think she should have given him a chance; at least meet over drinks. He’s much better than the guy a “friend” set me up with in high school. The entire date, all he did was talk about that friend…turns out he was obsessed with her. (Don’t believe me? He managed to drive by her house on the way to the movie to see if she was home! Yeah, that guy was a real freak :))


    June 7, 2013 at 7:21 am

    • Hmm. I’m not sure who was more at fault – your friend for setting you up with him to try to get him off her back, or him for not being honest. Hopefully your dates got better thereafter. 🙂

      Sarah Ann

      June 7, 2013 at 8:17 pm

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