Sarah Ann Hall

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#Trifecta: Week 79 – Another Day at the Office

with 15 comments

This week’s one-word prompt from Trifecta’s Writing Challenge is:

 

APPEAR
1a : to be or come in sight <the sun appears on the horizon>
b : to show up <appears promptly at eight each day>
2: to come formally before an authoritative body <must appear in court today>
3: to have an outward aspect : seem <appears happy enough>

 

The rules:

Your response must be between 33 and 333 words.

You must use the 3rd definition of the given word in your post.

The word itself needs to be included in your response.

You may not use a variation of the word; it needs to be exactly as stated above.

Only one entry per writer.

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Another Day at the Office (280 words)

They lay face to face: legs locked together, fingers entwined, bellies touching. His was sprung like an orthopaedic mattress, hers softened by the comfort of children. His passport said he was Tomas from Prague; the tattoos said military, more lately mercenary. Her wallet announced she was Sally from Cardiff, mother of two, married to Brian.

Cameras flashed, fingers pressed flesh to check lividity, then they were bagged and carried away.

***

‘It would appear your wife has been having an affair,’ Detective Ames stated, flipping her notebook.

‘Don’t be ridiculous. She works all day. She runs the house, looks after the children and me. Any spare time she has, she’s on her computer doing her Open University course. She doesn’t have time for an affair.’

Her computer?’

‘Yes, we have one each.’

‘We’ll have to take it.’

***

‘What did the pathologist say?’

‘Overdose of barbiturates and tranquilisers.’ Hawkins reported to his boss.

‘He didn’t look the type.’

‘I don’t think he had much choice. There was phenobarbital in the quiche and the chocolate mousse was laced with diazepam. Add that to the vodka martinis and the champagne, and there was only one way the night was going to end.’

‘And the computer?’

‘Their email traffic fits with the husband’s assertion that she was studying. It all took place at night, quite steamy in a loving way. Tomas came across as genuine. I don’t doubt she thought he loved her.’

‘Maybe he did. We haven’t anything to say otherwise. Instead we have two dead bodies and a broken family thanks to another internet fantasy,’ Ames sighed and shut the file on her desk. ‘People’s stupidity never ceases to amaze me.’

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Written by Sarah Ann

May 30, 2013 at 8:44 pm

15 Responses

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  1. Awesome! I’m wondering what the motives were but I guess the cops are, too. Maybe it would have been better to know a little bit more about the wife – what she thought, etc. But you do have the word limits so I can see why you wouldn’t be able to do that.

    erickeys

    May 30, 2013 at 8:50 pm

    • Thanks Eric. I had another 50 words, which I think I needed to use to make her motives/ what she did clearer. She’d found the love of her life, or so she thought, and didn’t want to lose him again.

      Sarah Ann

      May 31, 2013 at 8:18 pm

  2. Who killed who? Did she kill him, or did they both kill each other, or was it a murder-suicide with her killing them both? I’m a little confused. At first I didn’t know what was going on. I think the police want to know more too. 🙂

    Scriptor Obscura

    May 30, 2013 at 10:04 pm

    • My idea was murder-suicide – she poisoned herself and her beloved because she didn’t want to be parted from him. I needed to make that clearer to the cops (and the reader). Maybe there’s an explanatory email somewhere I need to dig up. 🙂

      Sarah Ann

      May 31, 2013 at 8:17 pm

  3. I suppose she died happy, even if she was betraying her husband >__<

    Draug419

    May 31, 2013 at 5:07 am

  4. It appears computers weren’t the only things they kept separate from each other. And the real mystery is just beginning!

    Thank you for linking up!

    trifectawriting

    May 31, 2013 at 5:21 am

    • No, they kept secrets, or she did. And the mystery is how she got to that point… Thanks for reading.

      Sarah Ann

      May 31, 2013 at 8:28 pm

  5. Oh, this was good! I totally didn’t expect the ‘bagged and carried away. So many questions and possibilities. Either one of them could’ve been the culprit, or perhaps the husband knew more than he let on and he decided to end the affair himself. Maybe your muse will inspire you to write more of this story 🙂

    jannatwrites

    May 31, 2013 at 5:23 am

    • Thanks Janna. I think I need to write more (maybe a prequel to see how she got to this point) as I knew what was going on but made the fatal mistake of not making it clear to the reader. Too much in my head, not enough ont he page.

      Sarah Ann

      May 31, 2013 at 8:21 pm

  6. Those first two paragraphs! Man! Two ships in the night one minute and the next tagged and bagged.
    Great piece!

    KymmInBarcelona

    May 31, 2013 at 11:33 am

    • 🙂 I liked those first two paras best, but I couldn’t leave it there, unfortunately.

      Sarah Ann

      May 31, 2013 at 8:23 pm

  7. Stupid cops.. I would guess Brian found out. Love the description of the bodies and how it took a while to understand they were dead.,


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