Sarah Ann Hall

Reporting on writing in progress or, more probably, not; practising flash fiction.

#FiveSentenceFiction – Charmed

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Five Sentence Fiction is about packing a powerful punch in a tiny fist. Each week Lillie McFerrinposts a one word inspiration. Anyone wishing to participate writes a five sentence story based on the prompt. The word does not have to appear in the five sentences, just use it for direction.

This week: CHARMED





A Changeling?

Estelle thrived while her brothers withered; she was dark when her parents were fair; she was silent in a family of talkers.

At school, the other kids looked at her askance, forever wary; she was always the last to be picked for games despite her speed and agility.

Estelle grew into a beauty, a tender orchid unlike the boisterous, blowsy camellias of her aunts. Men came a-courting and left a-weeping, bloodied and bruised.

Estelle died alone and happy, the wise-woman of her village, the question still unanswered.


Lillie McFerrin Writes


Last week’s word was ACCIDENT. I was too late to post so have added my story on the end here.



Tom and Billy’s legs swung over the escarpment edge as they looked down. Red, white and blue sparkles illuminated the scene like on carnival day. Sirens screamed from all directions, their wails dying only within yards of the crumpled vehicles. Down below, everyone was the size of a pea between forefinger and thumb: the firemen cutting off rooves, the ambulance staff carrying bodies, and the police, standing further away and directing traffic. Billy and Tom smiled at each other one last time, before their souls went their separate ways.



Written by Sarah Ann

May 28, 2013 at 9:08 pm

18 Responses

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  1. Estelle sounds like someone I’d love to meet.


    May 28, 2013 at 9:26 pm

    • Me too. She’s got lots of stories to tell, and a lot to teach I think.

      Sarah Ann

      May 29, 2013 at 11:17 am

      • Indeed! She might be worth another story, yes?


        May 29, 2013 at 1:31 pm

      • Oh hell. I’ll have to put my thinking cap on. I’ll let you know when she speaks again.

        Sarah Ann

        May 29, 2013 at 7:22 pm

      • Please do! I’m looking forward to it!


        May 29, 2013 at 7:23 pm

      • Any ideas as to which point in her life you want to hear about?

        Sarah Ann

        May 29, 2013 at 7:34 pm

      • Yes. I want to hear about the moment when she realized that she would die alone and happy. I want to know that moment when she realized that she did not need a man (or woman?) to make her complete.


        May 29, 2013 at 7:36 pm

      • You don’t want much then. Okay, thinking, thinking, thinkng….

        Sarah Ann

        May 29, 2013 at 7:49 pm

      • You asked. 😉


        May 29, 2013 at 7:53 pm

  2. I like having some questions unanswered. Without a bit of mystery, life would be boring.

    Both stories are good!

    K R Smith

    May 29, 2013 at 1:33 am

    • I think Estelle would be a much more ordinary person if we had all our questions about her answered.
      Thanks for reading both stories – very happy you liked them.

      Sarah Ann

      May 29, 2013 at 11:20 am

  3. I loved this, absolutely fantastic! 🙂


    May 29, 2013 at 7:16 pm

  4. The question is still left unanswered indeed, I enjoyed the image of the 2nd last line. RTA – very eerie and excellent visuals.


    June 1, 2013 at 8:06 am

    • Thank you. There might be more to come on Estelle thanks to Eric’s prompting (see comments above). But I doubt we’ll ever know the answer to that question.

      Sarah Ann

      June 3, 2013 at 10:11 pm

  5. Both beautiful in different ways. Both enjoyable stories! 🙂

  6. […] McFerrin’s Five Sentence Fiction Challenge using the prompt Charmed. The character that emerged, Estelle, raised many questions. In particular, Eric Keys commented that he’d like to […]

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