Sarah Ann Hall

Reporting on writing in progress or, more probably, not; practising flash fiction.

#Trifecta: Week 77 – Night Manoeuvres

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This week’s Trifecta challenge, write a 33 to 333 word story using the 3rd definition of the prompt:


1: characterized by or resulting from careful and thorough consideration <a deliberate decision>
2: characterized by awareness of the consequences<deliberate falsehood>
3: slow, unhurried, and steady as though allowing time for decision on each individual action involved <a deliberate pace>



Night Manoeuvres (33 words)

The night was quiet, the last shush of tyres long gone. Even the girl had stopped whimpering.

The key thundered in the lock. His actions purposeful, deliberate. She should know he was coming.




Written by Sarah Ann

May 16, 2013 at 11:01 pm

11 Responses

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  1. Oh, that’s supremely creepy.

  2. Creep-sylvania >__< So much terror in 33 words.


    May 17, 2013 at 4:42 am

  3. “The key thundered in the lock.” Holy cow, that’s a chilling sound.


    May 17, 2013 at 5:12 am

    • I wasn’t sure I wasn’t being over the top with thundered, so I happy to know it worked as chilling.

      Sarah Ann

      May 18, 2013 at 4:52 pm

  4. Gulp. I should’ve read this earlier in the evening. This is so creepy! I don’t even want to know what exactly he has planned. Can I just pretend it’s a game of Go Fish, please? 🙂


    May 17, 2013 at 6:04 am

    • Thankfully, I don’t know what he had planned either. My imagination switched off at the door. If Go Fish makes you feel better about it, pretend away.

      Sarah Ann

      May 18, 2013 at 4:54 pm

  5. Yes this was maximized suspension…

  6. Glups.


    May 17, 2013 at 5:56 pm

  7. I’ll lock up tonight!

    Arpy Jonas

    May 18, 2013 at 9:43 pm

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