Sarah Ann Hall

Reporting on writing in progress or, more probably, not; practising flash fiction.

#FiveSentenceFiction – Goggles

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I’m nipping in just under the wire with Lillie McFerrin’s challenge this (last?) week. My brain seems to have been in neutral for a while.


Five Sentence Fiction is about packing a powerful punch in a tiny fist. Each week Lillie McFerrin posts a one word inspiration. Anyone wishing to participate writes a five sentence story based on the prompt. The word does not have to appear in the five sentences, just use it for direction.

This week: GOGGLES



At 73, Trevor had seen multifarious pairs of goggles, and worn a fair few during his working life, but he was always open to learning about more.

There’d been the small airless ones he’d sported to protect his eyes from the scouring sand as he’d bartered with the Tuareg. There were the dark wraparound type that had fended off sparks of metal that flew as he ground and polished the hulls of boats and planes. And there had been the water-tight pressure-tested kind that had allowed him to examine the multi-coloured and multi-limbed fauna of the coral reefs during his environmental days.

So sitting in the dentist’s chair, wearing loose-fitting, badly made, safety glasses, while the nice lass scraped at the remaining stumps in his jaw, was ever such a disappointing new experience.


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Written by Sarah Ann

May 14, 2013 at 8:12 pm

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  1. Like the build up of this. And the voice – ‘ever such a’ is definitely him


    May 16, 2013 at 3:36 am

    • I’m prone to using ‘ever so slightly’ and have to pull myself up when my characters use it – is it them or is it me? Pleased to know he was an ‘ever such’ sort of bloke.

      Sarah Ann

      May 18, 2013 at 4:46 pm

  2. Aw, you had to end this in the dentist’s chair?! (*cringe*) I was with the adventures of scouring sand, polishing metal, and exploring reefs. Scraping the remaining stumps from his jaw, oh no…I’m outta there!

    (Sorry, my apprehension about dentists is showing :))


    May 16, 2013 at 5:43 pm

    • Apologies for the dentist. This was a bit of real life creeping in as I went to the dentist this week – no scraping or drilling, but the goggles were on every face in the room.

      Sarah Ann

      May 18, 2013 at 4:49 pm

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