Sarah Ann Hall

Reporting on writing in progress or, more probably, not; practising flash fiction.

#VisDare 18 – Inspect – Missing

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This week’s VisDare photo is fantastic. However, I didn’t want to talk from the point of view of a fish, which was the first thing that came to mind, and any other ideas made themselves absent until now.


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Missing (150 words)

They found Morgan face down on the deck, fingers splayed like starfish, eyes glazed. Her father lifted her lifeless yet living body and carried her home. Warmth and fluids did nothing to revive her. At the hospital all scans were normal, yet she failed to respond.

‘I shouldn’t have taken her, but she wanted to see them. There hasn’t been such a good show in years. She was in the water only a matter of minutes,’ Morgan’s father explained for the umpteenth time, tears streaming unnoticed down his cheeks.

‘It’s not your fault, my love,’ his wife soothed, wiping away the salty rivulets, ‘she’ll come back to us when she’s ready.’

They took Morgan home and loved her. The longer her body lay motionless, the more they feared she wouldn’t return.  And while they fretted, Morgan’s soul laughed and soared as it was carried aloft by her pod of dolphins.




Written by Sarah Ann

May 6, 2013 at 8:54 pm

4 Responses

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  1. Sad and yet hopeful in a way, I think you did a wonderful job.

    • Thank you Björn. I’m glad you felt there was some hope. I imagine Morgan will come home once she’s bored. There’s only so much swimming with dolphins a girl can do.

      Sarah Ann

      May 7, 2013 at 9:34 pm

  2. O wow. This is a distinctly new spin on the prompt — it had not occurred to me that the girl was splayed that way because she was somehow….vacant. Great twist on the photo. Haunting and yet hopeful in a way, like Bjorn said. Lovely work!

    • Thanks, Angela. I’m glad you liked it. I was trying to do something different with the prompt as that fish was crying out for a voice and others gave him a better voice than I could.

      Sarah Ann

      May 13, 2013 at 10:19 pm

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