Sarah Ann Hall

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Two for Tuesday Challenge #5 — A Meeting of Minds

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Going away for the weekend plays havoc with my writing, hence a plethora of late (and rushed) story posts. First up is Andy Black’s Two for Tuesday Challenge for 22nd-29th April.

 

‘Here is this week’s two-fer:

Standard prompt:
artificial intelligence

Non-Standard Prompt:
One of my favorite quotes is: “A metaphor is like a simile.” This week for the second prompt, I am pushing similes and metaphors. If you need a refresher on metaphors and similes you can check out my earlier post on the subject.  Write a story that is heavily ladened with similes and/or metaphors. The requirement is that you have a minimum of one simile/metaphor per every 50 words of your final word count. The challenge will be to make it feel natural and not forced. As per usual with the Non-standard prompt there is no word limit but there is a minimum of 200 words so you will have at least 4 similes/metaphors in your story. If your story stretches out to 300 words you should have a minimum of 6 similes/metaphors, a 350 word story will have 7 and so on.’

 

My story is not laden with similes and metaphors. I got a simile in early on, but then trying to make the story work took over.

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A Meeting of Minds (331 words)

Anna and Nick hadn’t seen each other for ages when they bumped into each other in town.

‘Did you ever get round to ordering a clone?’ Nick asked.

‘Oh, didn’t I email? Celia’s like a rocket-propelled grenade cleaning the apartment.’

‘You named her Celia?’

‘It’s better than calling her Clone.’

‘But mightn’t you be too attached when the time comes?’

‘I’m hoping we’ll die a happy old age together and there’ll be no need to harvest from her. But what about you and Pat? How are you getting on in the new AII house?’

‘It’s the best thing we ever did. Artificial-Intelligence-Integrated products are the way to go. The fridge senses when any of her contents is heading towards imminent decay, super chills it and let’s us know so we can bin or eat. We just have to tell the cooker what food we’ve got and whether we’re on a calorie maintenance day or not, and it makes recipe suggestions. We prepare, it performs, we end up with delicious food every time.’

‘Aren’t there any downsides to all those independent minds in one place?’

‘Are you kidding? Life is so easy. When we let the house know we’re having a party, the vacuum does the floors, the self-cleaning surfaces work a little longer, the fridge chills the champagne to a perfect temperature, and the cooker suggests the most delightful canapés. Life’s a dream.’

‘Don’t you worry about happened to the Baptiste woman?’

‘Good heavens, no. All the chips have been modulated since then. There won’t be any more cases of appliances going rogue and poisoning their owners.’

‘And the electrical fault that fried the Oliver’s incontinent cat?’

‘Listen to yourself, Anna. Stop being such a misery.’ He checked the time. ‘Now I must dash. I’ve got to meet the engineer at the house. The front door has started to stick.’

Anna watched him flit away wondering what the door was trying to say. Was is trying to keep Nick in, or out?

 

 

 

Read the others’ stories here.

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  1. Well if that’s something that you rushed off in a dash, I am envious. Great plot, snappy but believable dialogue and perfect use of the “artificial intelligence” prompt. Humor is hard to do but you gave us a good laugh. Loved it! Thanks for playing. I hope to see you next week!

    ahblack57

    April 30, 2013 at 1:23 pm

    • Oh Andy, you’ve got me blushing with that glowing comment. I’m glad the AI reference worked – I wasn’t sure it didn’t stand out. Glad too that the humour came across. I’m not sure Anna will be looking up Nick any time soon.

      Sarah Ann

      April 30, 2013 at 4:04 pm

      • Guys are enamored with technology. And technology that cooks food? Well, I guess there is a God. The occasional poisoning and electrocution can be overlooked… Poor misguided Nick.

        ahblack57

        April 30, 2013 at 5:20 pm


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