Sarah Ann Hall

Reporting on writing in progress or, more probably, not; practising flash fiction.

#VisDare 12: Waiting – View From Under the Pew

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It seems the VisDare prompts from Angela at Anonymous Legacy are bringing out my inner menagerie.


150 words – or less.
(Please – no erotica or graphic violence.)
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View From Under the Pew (150 words)

‘Stop chewing that kneeler. She’ll hear you.’

‘But I’m hungry and she’s been there for ages.’

‘She’ll be gone soon. Once she’s dried her eyes and wiped her nose. She’ll stay longer if she spots you.’

‘I like it when they see us. All that screaming and jumping up and down.’

‘You have a weird sense of fun.’

‘I like those busy days too, when they do all the singing. We get to eat whatever falls out of pockets and they leave us loads of stuff for nesting.’

‘We’re more likely to get squashed on those days, and they can stampede if they see us. Remember what happened last time?’

‘Oh. Yeah.’

‘That’s when they brought the traps and we lost your brother.’

‘He was always more daring than me.’

‘It’s a fine line between daring and stupid. Look, she’s going now. Now don’t forget – no droppings in the wafers.’



Written by Sarah Ann

March 26, 2013 at 12:59 pm

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  1. LOL!!! This made me laugh out loud!! Love how the personalities come through dialogue alone – and glints of their world, from their view. Cheeky and well-worded. Love this!!

    • Thank you. This was another fun one to write. I’m so glad you liked it.

      Sarah Ann

      March 28, 2013 at 6:21 pm

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