Sarah Ann Hall

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#Trifecta: Week 69 – End of a Marriage

with 21 comments

This weeks Trifecta challenge gave writers the prompt:

INFECT
1: to contaminate with a disease-producing substance or agent (as bacteria)
2a : to communicate a pathogen or a disease to
b : of a pathogenic organism : to invade (an individual or organ) usually by penetration
c : of a computer virus : to become transmitted and copied to (as a computer)
3a : contaminate, corrupt <the inflated writing that infects such stories>  
b : to work upon or seize upon so as to induce sympathy, belief, or support <trying to infect their salespeople with their enthusiasm>

 

The rules:

Your response must be between 33 and 333 words.

You must use the 3rd definition of the given word in your post.

The word itself needs to be included in your response.

You may not use a variation of the word; it needs to be exactly as stated above.

Only one entry per writer.

Trifecta is open to everyone.  Please join us.

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End of a Marriage (36 words)

Gnarled knotted hands, staring watery eyes; mouth slack, perpetually open for flies. His response to everything, only a nasal grunt.

She will not allow him to infect her with his aging corporeality.

She lifts the cushion.

 

 

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Written by Sarah Ann

March 21, 2013 at 8:20 pm

21 Responses

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  1. Uh oh, lifting the cushion can’t be a good thing! I loved the phrase “perpetually open for flies”

    angieinspired

    March 21, 2013 at 8:43 pm

    • Thanks for reading. No, lifting the cushion isn’t good. I’m glad you liked the “perpetually open for flies” – it took a while to get that right – I wasn’t sure it wasn’t too obvious.

      Sarah Ann

      March 22, 2013 at 9:37 pm

  2. Whoa! Powerful. I love how few words it took you to build the relationship and the punch!

    rangewriter

    March 21, 2013 at 9:26 pm

    • Thank you. I like that Trifecta asks for so few words. I don’t think I’d make half the challenges if it asked for more. And it makes me think and condense, which is good as I can waffle.

      Sarah Ann

      March 22, 2013 at 9:39 pm

  3. Ah,I love this Sarah!Why should one have to be infected in such a sad manner-marriage is only till “death do us apart”-so apart be it 😉

    atrm61

    March 21, 2013 at 10:00 pm

    • Glad you enjoyed it. I’m not sure he’d agree to be apart, which is why she’s resorting to desperate measures. But I agree, divorce might be safer.

      Sarah Ann

      March 22, 2013 at 9:40 pm

      • Oh,I did not mean to imply “divorce”-my wicked mind will ofc think of murder(see my stories-most are full of murderers,lol!)

        atrm61

        March 25, 2013 at 12:43 am

  4. This is short, and…sweet? Excellent descriptions and a ‘boom’ ending. Well done!

    • No not very sweet. When I saw the prompt I immediately thought about being infected by someone’s negativity, and ended up here – oops.
      Thank you for your lovely comments.

      Sarah Ann

      March 22, 2013 at 9:42 pm

  5. I love how you said so much in so few words. Very good.

    deanabo

    March 22, 2013 at 12:01 am

    • Thank you. I enjoy writing very short stories – just hope they make sense to everyone who reads them.

      Sarah Ann

      March 22, 2013 at 9:45 pm

  6. A lot of story in so few words. I’ve been in a failed marriage and you nailed it.

    Lumdog

    March 22, 2013 at 2:20 am

    • Thanks for your encouraging comments. Thankfully, I haven’t suffered a failed marriage, but my story was inspired by relationships I’ve witnessed – although there haven’t been any raised cushions.

      Sarah Ann

      March 22, 2013 at 9:55 pm

  7. o.o
    Well…til death do you part and all that…Wicked piece.

    Draug419

    March 22, 2013 at 4:11 am

  8. Ha, smoth piece

  9. Wow! She doesn’t take any prisoners does she? Nice one Sarah Ann.

    Sandra

    March 22, 2013 at 8:39 am

    • No, she doesn’t like anyone or anything holding her back. Thank you.

      Sarah Ann

      March 22, 2013 at 9:47 pm

  10. Oh, no! Just saw “Amour” last night…

    KymmInBarcelona

    March 22, 2013 at 12:51 pm

    • She only lifts the cushion – he might fight back, get the upper-hand even?
      Haven’t seen “Amour” yet. Did you enjoy it?

      Sarah Ann

      March 22, 2013 at 9:58 pm


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