Sarah Ann Hall

Reporting on writing in progress or, more probably, not; practising flash fiction.

#VisDare 11: Whorl – Conversation Among the Hostas

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I had almost given up on creating anything for this week’s VisDare challenge. Nothing I tried came to anything, until I attempted a continuation from last week’s story.


150 words – or less.
Post entry to your blog and “link in”.
(Please – no erotica or graphic violence.)
As always – thanks for participating!



Conversation Among the Hostas (150 words)

‘Where have you been?’

‘Under the raspberries. They’ve gone wild and the birds can’t get through the basket of branches.’

‘She’ll be pruning them soon.’

‘Yeah, but the rhubarb will be out by then. That’s always good for a decent feed and lots of cover.’

‘Did you hear about Pete?’

‘Poor old Pete, plucked by a pigeon.’

‘That’s not very sympathetic.’

‘He annoyed me, thinking he knew everything.’

‘He’d survived here a long time.’

‘With an advantage! Snails don’t ride bareback, remember. They’re obsessed with their shells; all whorls and curls and pretty patterns.’

‘Simeon’s gone too. Seeing Pete carried off put his antennae in a twist. He’s squelched off to number 33.’

‘With the pond? He won’t last long there.’

‘No. But Pete wasn’t able to tell him before, well, you know.‘

‘Poor Pete. He had his uses. But we’d better slime on before ‘you know’ happens to us.’



Written by Sarah Ann

March 19, 2013 at 9:02 pm

4 Responses

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  1. Terrific writing!


    March 19, 2013 at 10:36 pm

  2. O, this is so much fun! Love the continuation from the snail’s POV, and the jabs at the expense of “poor old Pete.” Nice use of the prompt in a symbolic way, instead of a time/scene altering whirlwind. Gives a nice narcissistic twist to the snail’s view of things. Well done!!

    • I’m glad you’ve enjoyed reading them. They’ve been fun to write. Narcissistic snails – who’d have thought? I don’t think snails or slugs will figure next week, but who knows?

      Sarah Ann

      March 20, 2013 at 7:07 pm

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