Sarah Ann Hall

Reporting on writing in progress or, more probably, not; practising flash fiction.

#FiveSentenceFiction – Paradise

with 3 comments

Five Sentence Fiction is about packing a powerful punch in a tiny fist. Each week Lillie McFerrin posts a one word inspiration, then anyone wishing to participate will write a five sentence story based on the prompt word. The word does not have to appear in your five sentences, just use it for direction.

This week: PARADISE



Running through sun-dappled woodland, one hand brushing away sap-filled branches, holding onto Josh with the other.

Called away from work by a desperate text to take Josh his forgotten lunch.

Ferreting under beds on worn-out knees to retrieve dirty underwear and dried-up plates.

Familiar scowls as she cleans the football-boot trail from the kitchen floor for the third time.

What she wouldn’t give to go through it all again, if only they would return her boy.


Lillie McFerrin Writes


Written by Sarah Ann

March 18, 2013 at 9:39 pm

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  1. I really liked that, the patter of the words and you have left me wanting to know who they are and why they have taken her boy. Great.


    March 18, 2013 at 10:29 pm

    • Thank you, Kate. I had no idea who or why they’ve taken her boy. Maybe I’ll be able to find out with the next prompt?

      Sarah Ann

      March 19, 2013 at 9:30 pm

  2. Enjoyed the intensity, and the feel of despair and desperation came right out in your last sentence…


    March 21, 2013 at 2:59 pm

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