Sarah Ann Hall

Reporting on writing in progress or, more probably, not; practising flash fiction.

VisDare 9: Alone – The Opening

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Here’s my second effort for Anonymous Legacy’s VisDare Challenge. I couldn’t get inside the picture this week, so my characters stood on the sidelines…



150 words – or less.

(Please – no erotica or graphic violence.)

As always – thanks for participating!



The Opening (147 words)

Millie and Sandra had stumbled into the art gallery to escape the rain.

‘What’s he doing?’ Sandra asked, glass of free wine in hand.


‘That man in the picture. Is it raining, or is he sitting in the middle of a fountain?’

‘Does it matter?’

‘It would be nice to know.’’

‘Ask the artist. She’s that brunette, I think.’

‘Could you live with it on your wall?’

‘Why not?’

‘He’s a bit miserable looking.’

The sound of muttering around them decreased suddenly as heads turned their way. Millie kept her eyes on the picture, allowing Sandra to soak up the ire of all around.

‘I like it,’ Millie said.

Once the crowd was talking again, Sandra nudged her, ‘Let’s go.’

As they walked out into sunshine, Millie dropped a sealed bid into the box by the door, confident of taking home the nice young man soon.



Written by Sarah Ann

March 5, 2013 at 8:49 pm

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  1. Ahhhh this is a great take on the prompt – not a departure at all. I think you’re the only one who’s proposed the scene as something observed entirely from the outside (like a painting), and I like all the mystery it evokes — the fantasy reader in me is suspicious that the painting is not all that it seems; the realist in me wonders what the conflicting interpretations of the painting reveal about the characters. Nice use of characterization through dialogue. Yay for your second return to the VisDare!!

    • Thank you. It was fun to write the characters. Following your comments, I need to have a closer look at the prompt to see what else might be going on.

      Sarah Ann

      March 6, 2013 at 9:12 pm

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