Sarah Ann Hall

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#Friday Fictioneers – 1/3/13 – Happy Days

with 32 comments

Every Wednesday Rochelle Wisoff-Fields publishes a photo prompt to stimulate and inspire writers to write 100-words of flash fiction or poetry.

Every Friday (or before) the Friday Fictioneers post their 100-word stories. Visit Rochelle’s site for the rules on how to join in and check out the other stories by clicking on the blue guy.



Copyright - Beth Carter

Copyright – Beth Carter

 

Happy Days (100 words) (Genre – middle of the road?)

‘You were conceived in there,’ I say, walking past the car-cum-shed. My daughter scowls, continues into the house.  I perch on the formerly red bonnet, fading to pink, rust patches spreading like measles.

I remember that summer. Pete and I speeding down country lanes, my hand touching his knee each time I changed gear – lingering, searching. Every gateway an opportunity to kiss, cuddle, and more.

I peek inside clapped out Millie the Mini, the keeper of our past. How did we manage?

Pete comes out, wraps me in his arms. ‘Shall we take her for one more spin?’

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Written by Sarah Ann

March 1, 2013 at 7:23 pm

32 Responses

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  1. Lovely story – I like the way the daughter doesn’t share her mother’s nostalgia for the car at all! A great warm little tale, really enjoyed it 🙂

    elappleby

    March 1, 2013 at 9:33 pm

    • Thank you. I was going to try and put myself in the romance writing genre this week – this is as close as I could get. Do children ever want to know their parents did ‘it’?

      Sarah Ann Hall

      March 1, 2013 at 10:49 pm

  2. Too much information for the daughter, I suspect. Nicely done

    Sandra

    March 2, 2013 at 8:53 am

    • Thanks, Sandra. Yes, definitely TMI whatever the age of daughter/ parent.

      Sarah Ann

      March 4, 2013 at 1:42 pm

  3. that’s a really lovely story…
    ‘You were conceived in there,’ — no doubt that’ll make me scowl too lol

    kz

    March 2, 2013 at 9:00 am

  4. TMI, for sure!! I can just see the expressions on our girls’ faces if we imparted this sort of information to them. But they should respect their parents’ flexibility if nothing else!!! Despite your story, my story (and others), I think that as cars go, this would be birth control except for those totally driven (so to speak) by desire! Way to small and uncomfortable-looking to me.

    janet

    sustainabilitea

    March 2, 2013 at 3:19 pm

    • Being a boring old square pants, I can only imagine what people got/ get up to in cars. But maybe, as an aid to ongoing flexibility, in-car activity should be encouraged? I agree on the too small and uncomfortable and will stick to using the car as an aid to get from A to B.

      Sarah Ann

      March 4, 2013 at 1:48 pm

  5. I could imagine my daughters look of horror!

    deanabo

    March 2, 2013 at 8:21 pm

  6. Dear Sarah,
    Kids just can’t fathom the fact that their parents just might enjoy relations. How do you think you got here? i used to ask my boys. Entertaining and sweet story.
    Shalom,
    Rochelle

    rochellewisoff

    March 2, 2013 at 10:05 pm

    • Hi Rochelle,
      Yep, there’s only ever one generation enjoying relations.

      Sarah Ann

      March 4, 2013 at 1:52 pm

  7. Such a likable horny old couple.

    lingeringvisions

    March 2, 2013 at 10:12 pm

  8. What age is the daughter? Teens I’ll bet. Cute story! I like the line of rust spots spreading like measles.

    tedstrutz

    March 2, 2013 at 11:26 pm

    • Teens. Maybe early 20s and desperate to move out. Thanks – I liked the rust spots too. I seem to write my FF stories in my head before sleep so have to try and memorise them. The rust spots nearly got forgotten when I came to type it up.

      Sarah Ann

      March 4, 2013 at 1:54 pm

  9. I love your take on the prompt, Sarah. I like your word choices to depict the mother-daughter relationship.

    The Bumble Files

    March 3, 2013 at 4:47 am

    • Thanks, Amy. Glad you liked it. I’m going to have another look at those word choices, now you’ve highlighted them.

      Sarah Ann

      March 4, 2013 at 2:03 pm

  10. Yup, I can just imagine the horrified expression on the daughter’s face.

    C. Patrick

    March 3, 2013 at 9:37 am

    • Thanks. Horrified or bored because she’s heard it all before.

      Sarah Ann

      March 4, 2013 at 2:00 pm

  11. car-cum-shed? does this mean what i think it means?

    rich

    March 3, 2013 at 8:50 pm

    • As you’re such a stickler for language, I’m sure you got the meaning, ‘used in combination to indicate dual function (Wordsworth Concise ED, 2007). 😉

      Sarah Ann

      March 4, 2013 at 1:58 pm

  12. Wonderful romancy. Hopefully it runs 🙂

    • Thank you, Björn. I’m sure the engine ticks over, but the tyres are going to need some work before she goes anywhere.

      Sarah Ann

      March 4, 2013 at 1:59 pm

  13. Sarah Ann, perhaps I am the odd bird, but I remember some of the conversations between my parents when looking at old photos, or reminiscing when they didn’t know I was listening, and finding these revelations intriguing. 😉 Such a sweet story!

    Lynda

    March 4, 2013 at 3:50 pm

    • Hi Lynda, I suppose it depends on what or who you’re listening to. I always found my nan’s stories interesting, but my gran’s bored me to tears. As for my parents, well they never did talk to each other much.
      I’m glad enjoyed my story.

      Sarah Ann

      March 4, 2013 at 8:37 pm

  14. My Dad used to speak of doing it in a rumble seat (Model-T)when he was young. Where there’s a will there’s a way. I loved the line, rust patches spreading like measles.

    rgayer55

    March 4, 2013 at 10:42 pm

    • Thank you, Russell. I’ve just looked up rumble seat – that was one brave and daring dad you had.

      Sarah Ann

      March 5, 2013 at 8:30 pm

  15. Ahh, beautifully nostalgic. I loved the line ‘rust patches spreading like measles’. Are they hoping for a sibling for the daughter I wonder…

    claireful

    March 5, 2013 at 5:32 pm

    • Thanks, Claire. I don’t think there are any siblings in the offing, at least not via the original method – they’d probably put their backs out clearing the rubbish from the car.

      Sarah Ann

      March 5, 2013 at 8:27 pm

  16. Just love this!

    anelephantcant

    March 7, 2013 at 10:11 am


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