Sarah Ann Hall

Reporting on writing in progress or, more probably, not; practising flash fiction.

An Afternoon Off – 100WCGU

with 6 comments

For this week’s 100 Word Challenge for Grown Ups, Julia’s prompt was

… beneath the surface …

“Do make sure you keep to the 100 words plus the 3 above and please link back here so that other writers can find us.”



An Afternoon Off (102 words)

The lake was a perfect mirror. Shards of light bounced from its surface into his eyes. The trees at its edge cast a cooling shadow, protecting him from the searing heat. He had got hot and sweaty during the rowing. A breeze lifted his shirt now and he welcomed its cooling effect.

He and Carrie had loved to picnic here, to escape to this tranquil place.

It would be time to go soon, back to work and the grind of normality.

It was so beautiful and unspoilt. As hard as he stared, there was no sign of her floating beneath the surface.


100WCGU (7)



Written by Sarah Ann

February 7, 2013 at 5:39 pm

6 Responses

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  1. The question is… who put her ‘beneath the surface’? I think I know… nice one.


    February 7, 2013 at 8:54 pm

    • Hmm. I think you know too. I suppose it depends how you read rowing – playing with oars or arguing.

      Sarah Ann

      February 8, 2013 at 9:19 pm

  2. Oh my!!! What a story! You got that one word perfect – of course as always I see – but there…you played with us, totally…and gave us a glimpse of his terrible, clinical off-hand ways. Still in shock from the sudden end!


    February 9, 2013 at 9:41 am

    • Thank you. I think you’re spoiling me with your comments, but thanks anyway. I’ll let you know when my head’s too big to get through the door.

      Sarah Ann

      February 9, 2013 at 2:25 pm

      • That story was just right..Sometimes it is hard to be told that! But I read a very lot of stuff on WordPress, a lot good – and some more than good…not spoiling, but good judgement I like to think…all the best!


        February 9, 2013 at 2:54 pm

  3. Creepy and very good!


    February 10, 2013 at 3:01 am

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