Sarah Ann Hall

Reporting on writing in progress or, more probably, not; practising flash fiction.

A Beautiful View – 100WCGU

with 6 comments

This week,  for the 100 Word Challenge for Grown Ups, Julia wanted us to close our eyes and imagine we were one of the figures looking out over the Grand Canyon.

“Your 100 words can either by the conversation that might happen or your thoughts as you look and experience the scene.”



A Beautiful View (100-words)

‘I’m scared.’

‘You’ll be fine. Just step forward slowly.’

‘What’s that noise?’

‘A helicopter bringing people to see the view. They include a champagne picnic.’

‘I know it’s beautiful, but I can’t go any further.’

‘Yes, you can. You’re perfectly safe. Just edge forwards a little.’

‘It’s getting louder.’

‘Don’t worry, there’s a no-fly zone around the platform.’

‘It’s no good. I can’t do it. I’m sorry.’

‘Let’s move to the side to let these people pass.’

‘Not the edge!’

‘The middle then.’

‘It’s still getting louder. And closer.’

‘Helicopters don’t come near the platform. We’re fine.’

‘It’s going to –’


Written by Sarah Ann

January 31, 2013 at 1:14 pm

6 Responses

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  1. Oh suspenseful!


    January 31, 2013 at 1:34 pm

  2. Very nice story

    Björn Rudberg (brudberg)

    January 31, 2013 at 11:14 pm

  3. Terrifying! You do a great job of building tension by mentioning the noise over and over – at first we just dismiss it as nerves, then we start to wonder what’s happening, and then…..


    February 4, 2013 at 11:42 pm

    • Thanks Sharon for your comments. I’m glad the tension built in the way you describe. That’s what I was hoping for.

      Sarah Ann

      February 5, 2013 at 10:57 pm

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