Sarah Ann Hall

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January Schooldays – 100WCGU

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This is my first attempt at a 100 Word Challenge for Grown Ups.

The challenge comes from Julia’s Place and this week was to incorporate

….the extreme weather meant…

with 100 words into a story.

January Schooldays (104-words)

The extreme weather meant the school bus couldn’t reach the outlying villages, a third of teachers didn’t make it in, the postman started delivering prescriptions, and the trains ran to a revised timetable.

Sasha rang Archie to say, ‘Sorry, I won’t be able to come to yours after school.’

‘Never mind. There’s always next week.’

‘Hope you have a good day.’

‘Oh yeah! Double games in the snow.’

Without enough staff to meet the required adult to child ratio, school closed at lunchtime. Archie took the short cut home along the railway cutting. He felt perfectly safe; no train was due for an hour.

 

 

100WCGU (7)

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Written by Sarah Ann

January 22, 2013 at 9:42 pm

13 Responses

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  1. This left me wondering if he really was perfectly safe, or if something terrible was just about to happen…

    annahalford (@anhalf)

    January 23, 2013 at 6:28 pm

  2. Oh that is clever! And so superbly dosed. A nightmare feeling reading that, too, as it is a mistake we can all so easily make. Very well crafted.

    yerpirate

    January 23, 2013 at 7:15 pm

    • Thank you for the glowing comments. I’m glad you liked it.

      Sarah Ann

      January 24, 2013 at 6:01 pm

  3. I felt a sense of threat in that ‘He felt perfectly safe’ – was that what you were going for?

    myothervoices

    January 24, 2013 at 3:41 am

    • Definitely. I don’t think Archie was aware the trains were running to a different timetable.

      Sarah Ann

      January 24, 2013 at 5:57 pm

  4. Interesting how a bland conversation can become precious. I like this piece.

    Miriam

    January 24, 2013 at 11:09 am

  5. OH NO! And you started so innocently by mentioning the revised timetable as just one of the little adjustments required by the weather…somehow I don’t think Archie is going to have a very good day.

    newpillowbook

    January 25, 2013 at 1:36 am

    • It took a while to put the revised timetable in the right place – too late and it sounded obvious and contrived, too early and I worried it might be missed. I’m pleased it worked.

      Sarah Ann

      January 25, 2013 at 12:18 pm

  6. Welcome to the 100 WCGU! Hope to see you joining in again each week. Poor Archie – I really get the feeling that shortcut is not going to turn out to be such a good idea.

    Sally-Jayne

    January 26, 2013 at 10:52 pm

  7. I hope the train isn’t early! great writing.

    deanabo

    January 27, 2013 at 11:21 pm

  8. Oh dear!

    Abraham

    February 13, 2013 at 2:55 pm


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