Sarah Ann Hall

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Trifextra Challenge: Week 51 – The Tractor

with 28 comments

 

This is my first attempt at a Trifextra Challenge so comments and criticism welcome.

The challenge was to choose one of three photos and write a 33-word response to it.

 

 

The tractor was the first thing he climbed successfully.

It spurred him towards walls, fences, trees.

Passion carried him up church spires and mountains.

Aged 20, he took his first, and last, tumble.

 

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Written by Sarah Ann

January 19, 2013 at 11:58 pm

28 Responses

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  1. That was an unexpected trip. Nice.

    KymmInBarcelona

    January 20, 2013 at 1:31 am

  2. Oh! A tragic end!

    joetwo

    January 20, 2013 at 2:51 am

  3. welcome to the challenge – you will fit right in and splendidly. Love the twist at the end.

    barbara

    January 20, 2013 at 2:55 am

    • Thank you. I’m think I’m looking forward to it – getting up to, then paring back down to, 33 words was hard.

      Sarah Ann

      January 21, 2013 at 1:20 pm

  4. Ah, mannn! I was so optimistic through most of this story then, wham!!! 20 is too young for a final tumble. Good storytelling in such a few words.

    • Thanks for your comment and sorry for the ending. Yes, 20 is too young for a final tumble. Maybe one fall was enough to hurt his pride and he took up something else?

      Sarah Ann

      January 21, 2013 at 1:22 pm

  5. Oh, such a sad ending to a short life of adventure!

    Patti

    January 20, 2013 at 4:56 am

  6. *glomps the new Trifectan*

    Oh dear…that ending! I love it. (:

    Draug419

    January 20, 2013 at 4:57 am

  7. What did he tumble from?

    themisanthropicmuse

    January 20, 2013 at 6:17 am

    • The last thing he was climbing. Something high and challenging.

      Sarah Ann

      January 21, 2013 at 1:23 pm

  8. I love the vagueness of the this–I have spent several minutes trying to decide if he literally tumbled off of the tractor, or if he metaphorically “tumbled” into his true love… Great entry

    Rachael

    January 20, 2013 at 8:35 am

    • Thank you for the comments and ideas. In my world he ended up dead, but I much prefer your idea of tumbling into love and finding new challenges to drive him on.

      Sarah Ann

      January 21, 2013 at 1:25 pm

  9. Welcome! πŸ™‚ You managed to fit a lot into 33 words – well done.

    Sandra

    January 20, 2013 at 9:56 am

    • Thank you, Sandra. I absolutely loved your pigeon with no sense of direction!

      Sarah Ann

      January 21, 2013 at 1:26 pm

  10. Wow. That’s a big story in only 33 words nicely done and welcome to Trifecta.

    Lumdog

    January 20, 2013 at 3:01 pm

  11. Yikes… risk/reward… we don’t always balance it.

    steph

    January 20, 2013 at 7:41 pm

  12. Oh no!Please don’t say he died so young?I hope he only stopped climbing..Interesting take,made me want to know the why’s & wherefores:-)

    atrm61

    January 20, 2013 at 7:52 pm

    • Well, he did, but Rachael has him tumbling into love so maybe he stopped climbing at 20 and moved onto something safer and more fulfilling.

      Sarah Ann

      January 21, 2013 at 1:28 pm

      • :-)Glad to read this-thk u Sarah-I like happy endings

        atrm61

        January 21, 2013 at 2:33 pm

  13. so very sad!

    deanabo

    January 20, 2013 at 8:26 pm

  14. Passion for adventure, but a tragic end. Nicely written.

    zennjennc

    January 20, 2013 at 10:25 pm

  15. I’m left wondering, too. Did he simply never tumble again? Or was that the big one? I’m fearing it was the latter.

    Great job with the prompt. Thanks so much for linking up with us this weekend. Don’t forget to go back and vote!

    trifectawriting

    January 21, 2013 at 3:16 am

    • Sorry, it was the big one. I tend to be a bit on the negative and dismal side. It’s great to have comments suggesting alternative reasons for his packing in climbing though.
      Thanks for the challenges – looking forward to more. πŸ™‚

      Sarah Ann

      January 21, 2013 at 1:38 pm

  16. What a tragic ending! I expected him to keep climbing and climbing πŸ™‚ Welcome to Trifecta – I think you’ll have fun with the challenges.

    jannatwrites

    January 21, 2013 at 3:32 am


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