Sarah Ann Hall

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#FridayFictioneers – 5/10/12 – The End of Summer

with 14 comments

Each week Madison Woods publishes a photo prompt for writers to conjure 100-words around – The Friday Fictioneers.

 

photo-by-Raina-Ng

The End of Summer

A grandmother surveys her home. The children are gone, the space uncluttered. Silence pours from the crannies and the low lights of autumn settle on calm. Darkness will fall soon.

Months collapse into weeks collapse into days – the domino run of time.

Floorboards creak under footsteps; the walls hang heavy with colour. Bodies snake their way through surfaces laden with parcels and food. Squeals of laughter cut through a fog of orange, cinnamon and ginger. The miasma of hot air created by voice and oven escapes through open windows.

Everyone is smiling. And when the snow falls, they begin to sing.

 

 

Thanks to Rich for the title. I don’t usually start a story with a title, but, after reading Rich’s fall post, the light in Raina’s photo just had to be autumnal. As the story turned out, I’m not sure it fits its title now anyway.


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Written by Sarah Ann

October 5, 2012 at 5:21 pm

14 Responses

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  1. Hi Sarah,
    A great, well-written evocation of fall. I love the phrase “the domino run of time.” Great descriptive phrasing.
    Ron

    bridgesareforburning

    October 5, 2012 at 10:11 pm

    • Thanks Ron. The domino run came to me after trying to set one up last weekend with my 6-year-old godson. Every time we’d nearly done, he just happened to knock it over and found it quite hilarious.

      Sarah Ann

      October 6, 2012 at 8:31 pm

  2. a great way to turn “time” into a physical object. nicely done, and i’m honored that i might have influenced you in any way, even if it’s just a title.

    rich

    October 5, 2012 at 10:37 pm

    • Thanks Rich. I’ll just have to steer clear of your posts if I don’t want to be influenced. You manage to convince me most times.

      Sarah Ann

      October 6, 2012 at 8:48 pm

  3. what a lovely way of showing the passage of time. Excellent job.

    Jessica Schira

    October 5, 2012 at 10:40 pm

  4. I love this – “Months collapse into weeks collapse into days”. Such a poetic way of describing how time tightens up as we approach an important date!

    newpillowbook

    October 5, 2012 at 11:14 pm

    • Thank you – poetic isn’t an adjective usually applied to my writing. It’s good to know it’s developing. 🙂

      Sarah Ann

      October 6, 2012 at 8:42 pm

  5. I loved the smooth transition in time, and the way so much activity was condensed in that second to last paragraph to give the sense of a busy home. Everything’s working in this one.

    Brian Benoit

    October 5, 2012 at 11:42 pm

  6. A great run-up to Christmas piece. I liked the ‘bodies snaking through surfaces laden with food and parcels’. Nicely done, very atmospheric.

    Sandra

    October 6, 2012 at 8:54 am

    • Thank you Sandra. I’m not sure I really want to be thinking about Christmas this far out, but I wanted the grandmother to have something cheerful and positive to look forward to. I’m still not sure I don’t prefer your Gran to mine though.

      Sarah Ann

      October 6, 2012 at 8:37 pm

  7. Wonderfully descriptive story Sarah. ‘The domino run of time’. Brilliant line!

    John Hardy Bell

    October 7, 2012 at 10:56 pm

  8. Dear Sarah,

    “The domino run of time…” Perfect description in the midst of beautiful description. A great story. Thank you for writing it.

    Aloha,

    Doug

    dmmacilroy

    October 10, 2012 at 8:07 am


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